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Secret

September 26, 2009
By EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide


“The way I see it, you have two choices.” He said declaratively “you can kiss me, He moved closer, or you can walk away and go your whole life wondering how it would be.” She smiled lightly and took a step toward him.
“The way I see it…” He waited “is that your right.” He was so close to her suddenly that her heart began to sputter and her blood boiled violently. She couldn’t keep her thoughts to herself and that intrigued him immensely.
“Your adorable cleare, you know I will never let you have the satisfaction of knowing how it is to be without me.” He smiled again and put his hands on both sides of her face, bending down to kiss her. The kiss started off normal the way a kiss normally does when it’s the first, but once she met his lips with hers she couldn’t help but take a breath and that drove him wild. He pulled her toward him swiftly and they were molded into each other. There was so much heat, so much passion that the air around them got hot and muggy though it was the middle of winter in the little Chicago town. He let her go and held her an inch away from him. Her eyes were glowing and he could tell she wanted nothing more than to stay with him as long as she could.
“I really wish you wouldn’t read my mind Jake” she breathed. “It’s intimidating.”
Cleare and Jake had known each other since 4th grade and ever since then they had been inseparable and together. Now it was junior year and they could no longer resist the temptation between them, But Jake had a secret. A secret worse than that of what Cleare knew. She loved him so much and he loved her, but will this secret rip them apart?



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on Mar. 20 2010 at 3:37 am
xoxoLissieM SILVER, Manila, Other
6 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stop acting dumb cause your usually the smart one and I'm the dumb one!"

i sooo luv it..anxiety gets me!!! cnt w8 4 d nxt one!!

on Mar. 18 2010 at 9:00 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

there is a second part

on Mar. 18 2010 at 7:08 pm
Green8a8 SILVER, NY, New York
8 articles 1 photo 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
im the author of my life, unfortunately im writing in pen therefore i can't erase nothing about it.-by some crazy friend of mine

wow this is seriously good it had me holding my breath lol

will there be a second part

soccerchick said...
on Mar. 18 2010 at 4:10 pm
is the name of this book "The Secret"?

on Feb. 2 2010 at 8:42 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

yes it is :p

on Feb. 2 2010 at 7:05 pm
MarinaOreo GOLD, King Of Prussia, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 148 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your soul is the whole world" -Siddhartha by Hermann Hesse

Great job! I love it. Is the second part up yet?

on Jan. 11 2010 at 2:38 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
27 articles 0 photos 266 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

it duz seem like twilight but i really like it. awesome descriptionz. agree with silver, little tired of twight stuff. u put a good twist on it :P

on Jan. 5 2010 at 7:43 pm
natygrace1217 PLATINUM, Jefferson, Maryland
24 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
trying is failing, doing is succeeding.

it was kinda twilightish but good. if you just start by writing down what is in your mind, you could end up with a whole big plot that turns into something impecable. really. that is how a true writer works their magic.

on Dec. 20 2009 at 12:12 pm
SilverLuna SILVER, _________, Washington
8 articles 0 photos 230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Come fairies take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.".... W.B. Yeats.
"Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss." - Douglas Adams

Yup, is his secret that he's a vamp? I do like the fact that he CAN read her mind though. That's a nice change. A little tired of twlight stuff i have to admit.

Ridelova101 said...
on Dec. 20 2009 at 9:52 am
I thought it was good, but I do agree it was very twilighty.

Malrose BRONZE said...
on Dec. 16 2009 at 11:59 pm
Malrose BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
1 article 5 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I cannot live without books!" -Thomas Jefferson

I thought this was good, but very twilighty... I hope the buy secret isn't being a vampire. But keep up the good

Work:)

on Dec. 2 2009 at 1:45 pm
music_lover PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
25 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
MY quote: "Without music, life would be absolutely pointless.... Music is my life and it always will be!"

WOW THAT WAS GREAT!

on Nov. 8 2009 at 9:26 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

check back in a few days for the second part :p

on Nov. 6 2009 at 8:11 pm
YouCanCallMeAlex SILVER, Cavecreek, Arizona
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments
Wow! This is really good! Keep writing!!

on Nov. 6 2009 at 7:19 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

k, i will definitely check out your other work!!!!

on Oct. 17 2009 at 1:44 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

Also, i just recently posted the second part so it should be up in a few weeks!

on Oct. 16 2009 at 11:38 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

thanks for your comment if you could, please rank it!

on Oct. 16 2009 at 3:59 pm
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
19 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

this is amazing. it leaves you wanting more.

i would love to read the whole thing.

if possible (:

on Oct. 15 2009 at 8:08 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

This weekend i will be posting the next section for this particular story. in case any body was unaware this is actually part of the neovel i wrote so once i get it all typed send me an email and i can send the link to anyone who wants it.

maree-ann33 said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 12:42 pm
i really love thus..it sounds soo like me. im going to see if i can get it..