Creative Writing Non Fiction Rubric

Thesis Statement

     While your thesis statement is clearly defined and worded impeccably (“Since analyzing the intellect of the human mind through cognitive science, I have concluded that the apocalypse is going to occur more rapidly than previously calculated based on the increasing level of animalistic behavior occurring on Black Friday.”), this a non-fiction essay, and your topic leads towards a story based plot. Try to keep towards a more realistic subject. Think about the how humans have developed this animalistic urge and how it affects today’s society.

12/20 pts

Clear Shift

     Your shift is highly inappropriate. The paragraph as follows is the primary offense:

         “The long night ticked away as she compiled her tally score of people camping out in family-sized tents, serving their little ones Thanksgiving meals from large cans and plastic silverware. She loaded her shotgun, as the first rays of sunshine beamed through the truck window. She would not let her people succumb to pass through the doors of hell and into the place where redneck obesity festers."

     This is offensive material. There is to be no violent themes prevalent in the content of this essay. I am discounting this as your shift piece, though you so helpfully labeled it “SHIFT” for me.

0/10 pts

Break the Form

     No. Wreaking havoc in Walmart is not only breaking the habits of the government system, but it does not apply to the rubric requirements. Form as in writing, not an uprising against “the tyrants of Purgatory”. 

3/15 pts

Grammar
     Your syntax choices are odd and not helping the flow of your story. The use of the following sentence, predeceased by the excessive use of exclamation points is not an effective choice: “THE TERMINATOR CHALLENGES THE WALMART FOLLOWERS WITH A LOOK OF BRUTE FORCE!!!!!!” Capital letters aren’t needed to get a point across. Points for trying new things.

2/10 pts

Timeliness

     This is a week late. Try to organize your time better so you can hand me a completed non-fiction essay by the due date. No excuses.  Certainly not, “The Richardson’s, from family-sized tent tally number 33, ripped both my arms off in the line of duty. I had to wait three weeks for my prosthetic limbs to come by post. It’s quite ridiculous how slow UPS has gotten. But now I’m a poster child for prosthetic success. I could sue you, now that I’m rich! Beware of the White Lotus.”  Overall, unimpressed.

0/15 pts

TOTAL 17 / 70 pts