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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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on May. 19 2011 at 1:39 am
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same here. but i saw as "parents taking control over their children". i dont know if im right. if it is, i like it. if its not, its ok tho.
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who cares? it's amazingly well-written, and has a lot of truth to it. If you want to get mad about stuff posted in the wrong catagory, go look at the sonnets.

And btw, free verse can technically include every type of poetry.

Great job!

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This is a great poem!! Keep it up
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ive comemted on this once or twice before, but i just read it again for like, the millionith time, and i got goosebumps, again. its amazing.
featherssss said...
on May. 13 2011 at 2:52 pm
this is a really interesting poem, i can relate to it because my parents were very strict and always held me back. good writing (:
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on May. 13 2011 at 1:03 pm
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on May. 7 2011 at 4:35 pm
 i love this poem it's the best
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Hey, I read your comment like a week ago and it's been bothering me. I promised myself I'd not get into any theological debates while on TeenInk, but here I am anyway. You said that this poem reminded you of a relationship with God, but, in the end of the poem, the father is holding chains. God doesn't hold us in bondage until Judgement day when we are bound to our sin. I was curious if that was what you meant...? Sorry, I'm just a girl with a lot of theology stored somewhere in the prefrontal cortex! :)

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wow thats fantastic check my wrighting out some time

 

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We may be able to loosen our chains, but can we ever really break free? Well, I guess maybe when we move or something.
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kitten nightshade said...
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I realy like it it remindes me that we are bound down untill we finally brake free!!
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I liked it a lot.  It reminded me of my relationship with my Mom.  Every time I try and break away, she pulls me back.  Some people may not understand it, but I get it.  And they'll get it too, someday.  Good job