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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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inkflowerKNC said...
on Jun. 10 2011 at 2:44 pm
inkflowerKNC, Townsend, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"When at first you don't succeed, try, try again."

it's pretty good, i like it.

Ang1996 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 11:27 am
Ang1996 BRONZE, N. Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
Never grow up

I don't get it what dose this mean. other than that it sounds like its a good poem

on Jun. 8 2011 at 12:04 pm
Br11anna BRONZE, Winston Salem, North Carolina
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Really nice poem!

on Jun. 6 2011 at 9:22 pm
AndreaLatinLoveLopez BRONZE, Boaz, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;No woman sleeps so soundly that the twang of a guitar will not bring her to sit beside her windowsill&quot;<br /> -Spanish Proverb

love it!! filled w/ lotsa emotion

on Jun. 4 2011 at 11:23 am
RanaHewezi1998 SILVER, Ames, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I may not have gone where I intended to go, but I think I&#039;ve ended up where I needed to be.&quot;<br /> -Douglas Adams

it has good rythmes!

on Jun. 3 2011 at 11:00 am
Highbarfreak87 SILVER, Indian Hills, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;There is no tomorrow, so do it today&quot;

Its such an odd poem to follow but its good!'

on Jun. 2 2011 at 3:00 pm
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil.&quot; - unknown author.<br /> &quot;All that we see or seem<br /> Is but a dream within a dream.&quot; - Edgar Allan Poe

this is truely a beautiful poem seriously it is

torivix SILVER said...
on Jun. 1 2011 at 6:59 pm
torivix SILVER, McLean, Virginia
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I love this! it's so... mysterious, yet so down to Earth. keep writing, please!!!

on Jun. 1 2011 at 3:27 pm
WeAllBurn PLATINUM, Vermilion, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The weak can never forgive. Forgiveness is the attribute of the strong.&quot; ~Mahatma Gandhi

wow.

i am wordless.

<3


on May. 29 2011 at 2:28 pm
RahmaReads BRONZE, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible, if you put your mind to it ;).

This is beautiful! You really have potential.

Alicia :) said...
on May. 27 2011 at 10:53 am
Wonderful Poem !

on May. 27 2011 at 9:00 am
Rinilove32 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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this poem is gorgeous!! i love it(:

on May. 27 2011 at 7:55 am
Bdawg325 BRONZE, Waterford, Michigan
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Set up very well.

on May. 26 2011 at 2:39 pm
Faithful365 BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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The peom was very well versed. You did a really good job at depicting what the protection of a parent can feel like.

on May. 26 2011 at 2:08 pm
krarthurs SILVER, Plymouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
All generous minds have a horror of what are commonly called &quot;Facts&quot;. They are the brute beasts of the intellectual domain. <br /> -Thomas Hobbes

I loved this poem. The innocence is very apparent and the dialogue was perfect. Very good job, keep it up!

on May. 25 2011 at 3:14 pm
EyesofBlueFire GOLD, Belleville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;We are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided.&quot; Dumbledore, Harry Potter, J.K. Rowling.

I love this poem. It's deep, but leaves it so that your readers can interpret it in different ways. Very well written. :)

Lynae13 said...
on May. 24 2011 at 1:16 pm
Lynae13, Uniontown, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Be a fruit loop in a world of cheerios.

LOVE IT....'nuff said

cara_ruegg said...
on May. 21 2011 at 8:02 pm
cara_ruegg, Germantown, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;live, laugh, love&quot;

Wow this is brilliant, and flowed very well.

on May. 20 2011 at 2:52 pm
Garcia_R. BRONZE, Woodburn, Oregon
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Mine will be up by Tuesday (:

on May. 20 2011 at 2:51 pm
Garcia_R. BRONZE, Woodburn, Oregon
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This is a great poem. check out mine