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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on May. 24 2013 at 12:11 pm
angel_of_silence PLATINUM, Cotulla, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“The boy never cried again, and he never forgot what he'd learned: that to love is to destroy, and that to be loved is to be the one destroyed.” -Jace Wayland City of Bones

wow this is a really great piece, very impressive

on May. 20 2013 at 8:41 pm
DoNotRegretThyFall SILVER, Wayzata, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
You may tell a tale that takes up residence in someone's soul, becomes their blood and self and purpose. That tale will move them and drive them and who knows what they might do because of it, because of your words. That is your role, your gift.

This poem is amazing and really speaks to me. If you guys could check out some of my work, I would really appreciate it! Thanks!

on May. 20 2013 at 4:45 pm
MinionPeach17 SILVER, Hardeeville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Spanish Version: "Una sonrisa no cuesta nada, Enriquece a quienes la resiven, sin empobreser a quienes la da".
English Version: "A smile costs nothing, It enriches those who receive it, without impoverishing those who give".

this poem is so relatable... I Love It... i wish i can make poems like this... but i ionly have a few  

on May. 19 2013 at 8:21 am
lalala123 BRONZE, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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awesome poem, I think everyone can relate to having a parent that holds them back sometimes.

on May. 17 2013 at 1:08 pm
monsterman0304 BRONZE, Florence, Kentucky
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this was an amazing poem. i love how u present ur emotions. check mine out sometime:)  

on May. 16 2013 at 11:06 pm
Gage1121 BRONZE, Santa Maria, California
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beautiful tears

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on May. 15 2013 at 6:19 pm
TheEcho, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words. -- Robert Frost

I truly ADORE this poem! It rocks, really. I love the message and the way it was presented. Great metaphor.

on May. 15 2013 at 9:28 am
lumpkinsrm PLATINUM, Hays, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
If you fail to prepare, then you are preparing to fail.

A VERY nice job. I love the poem.

on May. 14 2013 at 7:16 am
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Very Inspiring Poem ! GOOD JOB:) Can Anyone Please Check Out My Poem, I Would Appreciate Feedback ?!

on May. 13 2013 at 1:10 pm
Divagirl508 BRONZE, Staten Island, New York
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Favorite Quote:
It is easy to get to the top after you get through the crowd at the bottom .

what's the title of your poem call i would read it

on May. 11 2013 at 4:34 pm
CalebODell SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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I love the message underlying the poem. Don't let anyone, including your parents hold you down. Awesome job!

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on May. 8 2013 at 6:10 pm
NOVA232 SILVER, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
nothing is ever as it seems

Interesting. I love the metaphors. I would love it if u read my poem.

on May. 7 2013 at 10:03 pm
InactivistWithTooMuchOpinion GOLD, Cedar Park, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness makes up in height for what it lacks in length" -Robert Frost

Hi, this poem is so good! I almost can never write one tha rhymes but also makes sense at the same time. It would be really nice if someone would read/comment on some of my work. Don't mean to self-promote but it's kindof hard to get your work read on this website. Anyway, this was really good A+!

on May. 7 2013 at 6:21 pm
writingriver05 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"Reach for the moon, even if you miss you'll land amongst the stars."

It takes courage to write a poem like this thats all i have to say.

on May. 7 2013 at 12:57 pm
Draco_Shadowfire GOLD, Casa Grande, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"i have not failed i just found 100,000 ways that do not work"-->Albert Einstein

hey i like it it is really good and i like it uhm if anyone can read my 9 poems and comment i like the feedback and want to get better so i can actually publish a poetry book

on May. 6 2013 at 10:07 pm
Clarabelle SILVER, Caracas, Other
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I have an over-protective father, and though sometimes it can be a real bother, I know he's just taking care of me. You were able to portray that same message and feeling to me - Great job

on May. 6 2013 at 5:23 pm
Equestrainlife SILVER, Killen, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
Not all who wander are lost

Although I understand this work, I can't seem to grasp the exact meaning. Why the father? Why titled "Daddy's Womb"?

sadie.e said...
on May. 6 2013 at 4:39 pm
i thought the poem was amaizing , but im confused about the last verse.BTW the comments are to talk about there poem not to advertise yours.

emily G. said...
on Apr. 29 2013 at 11:56 am
This was so beautiful, you are truly an amazing writer..

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on Apr. 25 2013 at 5:24 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

I didn't quite understand this but i really liked it. BTW, i would love if anyone would check out some of my poems, i'm pretty new here and feedback would be great!