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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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malgal3 SILVER said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 12:30 pm
malgal3 SILVER, Uhrichsville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shall not condemn you for what you did wrong yesterday, if only you do it right today&quot;<br /> &quot;If you learn from your mistakes, won&#039;t you just keep making them?&quot;

Yeah, well I'm not going to lie either, YOU are weird my friend.

Sync. GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 10:17 pm
Sync. GOLD, Diamond Back, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new. &quot; -Albert Einstein

WOW!
This is perfect, it captured my heart and i sure as hell dont want it bck ths poem is soo great
i would appreciate it if you could look at some of my work expesually the latest one called minus a helping hand and give your oppinion :)

on Jan. 27 2010 at 6:18 pm
ColorsofChaos13 SILVER, Southampton, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I am not young enough to know everything&quot;<br /> &quot;These are days we dream about, when sunlight paints us gold, and this apartment could noat be prettier as we danced up there alone.&quot;

Wow, that's so intense, i love it for all it's darkness.

AbbyQ PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 11:14 pm
AbbyQ PLATINUM, Fairbanks, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;When the coroner cuts me open, he will find ink in my veins and blood on my typewriter keys.&quot;

Really? come on. keep it clean, guys.

Nickel BRONZE said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 4:57 pm
Nickel BRONZE, Waldorf, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 4 comments
this is really good

on Jan. 25 2010 at 7:03 pm
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;the greatest thing you&#039;ll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.&quot; -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

wuts wrong with it? its so creepy that its good.....

on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:16 am
I really like this poem, it reminds me of when I was a kid.

Keenan BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
Keenan BRONZE, Dennison, Ohio
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I'm not going to lie, it was a little weird. Especially the title. Wow...

alexc25 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
alexc25 BRONZE, Uhrichsville, Ohio
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WOW! this poem is creepy

Unknown said...
on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:41 pm
Amazing! Very well done!

on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:20 pm
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;the greatest thing you&#039;ll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.&quot; -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

OH MY GOSH THIS IS MY FAVE OF ALL TIME!! VERY GOOD VERY GOOD!

on Jan. 24 2010 at 2:17 pm
SeanConnery BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
1 article 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
A good deed never goes unpunished.

good poem

i like it

on Jan. 23 2010 at 3:44 pm
StevImagenary SILVER, Amarillo, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
One smile can bring joy to everyone you see.

I loved it. I think it's great to show your inner self.

on Jan. 21 2010 at 7:50 pm
zacharydinan PLATINUM, New York, New York
20 articles 5 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Maximilian, it was Edmond Dantes! (M. Morrel)

great job. It has a lot of hidden meaning. Please check out my poems.

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:40 pm
sjmblue2 BRONZE, Kennesaw, Georgia
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;This game is not easy, if it was easy everyone would do it, and if everyone did it, no one would be special.&quot;

I know this has meaning like someone else says....i really like it though, it really shows the reader what you all talking about.

Kara_333 said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:50 pm
Kara_333, Peabody, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Lookin like a fool with ur pants on the ground

extremely mature. they r trying to capture their memories of childhood. Ur still there.

on Jan. 18 2010 at 8:42 pm
NickAdams BRONZE, Louisville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;A way a lone a last a loved a long the // riverrun, past Eve and Adam\&#039;s, from swerve of shore to bend of bay, brings us by a commodius vicus of recirculation back to Howth Castle and Environs.&quot; -James Joyce in Finnegans Wake

Interesting poem. It seems so symbolic, and I'm still trying to figure it out.; especially, I enjoyed your selective use of capitalization. A little confused about the rhyme scheme, though, for while your poem is listed as free verse, several of the lines rhyme. They seem intentional but also rather sporadic and arbitrarily chosen. Alas that I cannot seem into the poet's mind!

On the whole, great work.

laliel said...
on Jan. 18 2010 at 5:10 pm
i love it

i think you truly

captured what it is to be a kid

always trying to fly

on Jan. 18 2010 at 2:03 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
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Chilling poem! I nearly farted..

on Jan. 17 2010 at 6:00 pm
innocence BRONZE, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;heres a lie i wish were true; i really really hate you too&quot;

This poem reminds me of my parents! i love it so much!

your writing is awesome!