Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Feb. 10 2010 at 10:31 am
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
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I dont kno wat every1 is going on bout....this is a really great poem. Y r other people saying when they ur being arrogant?? Theyre the 1s saying how much better THEIR writing is. Im sorry, but i really like this. You so obviously put ur heart into this poem and i really lik how ur attached 2 ur father. Its really deep and thought provoking.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 7:27 am
abstractminded GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
when life throws you lemons....throw back grenades

oh there not bad at all though....maybe i came on a little to harsh so i apologize but are you a boy or girl

on Feb. 10 2010 at 2:11 am
AmeVoleur BRONZE, Kaikoura, Other
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Favorite Quote:
For attractive lips,
speak words of kindness.

For lovely eyes,
seek out the good in people.

For a slim figure,
share your food with the hungry.

For beautiful hair,
let a child run his fingers through it once a day.

For poise,
walk with the knowledge you'll never walk alone...

People, even more than things,
have to be restored, renewed, revived,
reclaimed and redeemed and redeemed ...

Never throw out anybody. Remember, if you ever need a
helping hand, you'll find one at the end of your arm.

As you grow older you will discover that you have two hands.
One for helping yourself, the other for helping others".

Amazing! Please look at my poem I Wish
http ://teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/147125/I-Wish/

on Feb. 9 2010 at 9:16 pm
thecatscuriosity BRONZE, Allen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
People tend to go where life takes them, but what they dont realise is life can only go as far as you take it.- Tyler Redlich

These are the poems the world needs to see, we are the next generation and we need to be heard. keep it up, that goes for everyone. this is a great poem.

on Feb. 9 2010 at 8:32 pm
abeatlesfan65 GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"My greatest trouble is getting the curtain up and down." - T.S. Eliot

so high to fly

assault the skies-

they reach out,

as your arms grasp mindlessly

flailing about

the wondrous serpantine swirls

of a new, worldly route

these-

the musings of a wandering mind eternal, but paternal fate

one cannot appease,

to return another day

amidst far calmer seas

That pretty much sums up my thoughts on this one... it's amazing! Could you check out a few of my own? (Carl, or anyone else that sees this) Thanks!

on Feb. 9 2010 at 8:16 pm
abeatlesfan65 GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My greatest trouble is getting the curtain up and down." - T.S. Eliot

First, that depends on your point of view. Second, I read a few of your poems, and they're very good, but you're coming off as just a little arrogant.

on Feb. 9 2010 at 12:20 pm
abstractminded GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
17 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
when life throws you lemons....throw back grenades

to be honest i didnt quite like it ..i dont see how this is #1 mines are way better

*MAV* said...
on Feb. 9 2010 at 9:32 am
WOW i love it! check one of mine out:)
http ://teenink .com /poetry/all/article/86463/The-Author/

striker5 said...
on Feb. 9 2010 at 8:49 am
i can totally relate to that!! awesome poem, i love it! keep writing!!!!

stormie. GOLD said...
on Feb. 8 2010 at 3:52 pm
stormie. GOLD, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
ѕcаттεя мε аcяоѕѕ тнε ѕкy; аи∂ juѕт lιкε а ѕтая, ι'll ѕнιиε fоя yоu.♥

beautiful poem. i absolutely loved it. keep up the great work!! :)

nahb123 said...
on Feb. 8 2010 at 9:39 am
lol at the 'birdie' part :] but good.

on Feb. 4 2010 at 5:26 pm
Acalleq PLATINUM, Togiak, Alaska
22 articles 5 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
you never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

If I could describe the relationship with my mother and father... It would be almost exactly like this poem you wrote. It's cool that you could vent out your emotions on a piece off paper (or laptop) and share a piece of yourself to the world. Quana! (Thank you in Yu'pik)

on Feb. 4 2010 at 4:45 pm
Audrea15 PLATINUM, Murphysboro, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Everybody wants happiness. Nobody wants pain. But you cant have a rainbow. Without a little rain.

Takes a whole new prospective to growing up:) Great Work Keep Writing

on Feb. 3 2010 at 8:43 pm
DreamingWriter BRONZE, North Haledon, New Jersey
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love it... i can totally relate. This poem is amazing

on Feb. 2 2010 at 8:42 am
SaraRoxsHerSox SILVER, McVeytown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Brochacho!"

wow! beautiful poem! keep on writing!

on Feb. 1 2010 at 5:28 pm
I agree. I liked the poem, but the "birdie" sentence could easily be changed. Great poem. I completely understand its meaning, and it's not the sort of poem that is too direct, and the meaning isn't completely hidden either.

cheergal said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 1:09 pm
I like how your words all flow togeather

skstorc BRONZE said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 12:44 pm
skstorc BRONZE, Port Orange, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
\"You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have left.\"

that says alot.

i can relate to that.

kasfhksajd said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 11:52 am
it was intwresttubg

scbylvr said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 9:36 am
i like this poem its kinda sad and boring


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