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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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LaReSt said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 10:05 am
I have but it is a religious one. I am wating to see my work get published here. Hopefully it will be soon.
allie.vgr1994 SILVER said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:57 am
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I think it was one of the greatest things ever!!!!!! Have you writen anything like this?
allie.vgr1994 SILVER said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:55 am
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Yeah it was great I would agree!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥
allie.vgr1994 SILVER said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:53 am
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It was really good!!!!!! I really love people who express their feelings in that way!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥
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It's saying how a parent can tell you you can do anything and/or be anything but in the end they are the ones who try to hold you back be it for a reason like they aren't ready for you to go or selfish reasons.
ToyRe GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:56 am
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This is one of the best poems I have read. Good Job!!!
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this is so good... i love the symbolism you used. great job!
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I really like it. And apparently so does everyone else. 473??!! Keep up the good work!
MariaMarie DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 8 2010 at 4:25 pm
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lol, it's ok. Imagery is good
adam17 said...
on Mar. 8 2010 at 11:45 am
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i dont get it
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on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:03 am
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i really liked your poem...keep up the good work!!!!

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on Mar. 7 2010 at 8:47 pm
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er... imaginary, or imagery? sorry, I have a sick case of OCD.. hehe
Wayne92 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2010 at 9:08 am
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Your poem was very visual the picture of a boy wanting to go beyond grounds but at the end you was bound heck ima be able to write like this amazing keep it up
MariaMarie DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 7:51 pm
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I really love this, cool. It flows together good and the imaginary is awesome! :)
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i thought that your piece is beautifully put together. i love the way you let your thoughts out on paper... or online lol like i do. u should try to enter in on a contest
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I could only wish to write something like this. Great job!!!!
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its amazing your deep concept on life the grasp you have on it the view you see your poem in i dont know but in my minds eye as i read i saw a embodied adult ready to flee ready to become successful ready to be one on his own but as our ties to our parents emotional most causes us to linger around a bit.
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I think drowning is a metaphor for all the things a father cautions his son about... if the steps too deep, he will be enslaved by the water, but at the same time the father becomes hypocrite about it when he takes out the chain to enslave his son and prevent him from flying away (metaphor for being an overprotective father)
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I think that this poem is about growing up and wanting your own life and independence. I can really connect with it.
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I wish I could write a piece like this, honestly I couldn't follow on what was happening but it was deep and amazing, wonderful job!