Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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bmmsjr said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 8:57 am
that is good
bmmsgk said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 8:56 am
good job good job good job
SunnyGirl307 said...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 9:42 pm
This was amazing!
Hanner_:D replied...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 11:49 pm
I really enjoy reading poems like this. Where you give me so much visualization in what little space was there. You are a true poet. Keep writing for us.
Ariel W. said...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 3:30 pm
That poem is so true. Parents hate to let go of us but they need to for are and there own good.
i<3steven! said...
Feb. 25, 2010 at 3:16 pm
wow, that is deep
alli..g(: said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 9:56 pm
i love it!!! this is how most parents are...they dont let you go out into the world and see it with your own eyes,,,instead they tell you what you can and cant do and you try your hardest to prove them wrong((: they hate letting go((:
TimBonin said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 5:42 am
This is a great poem! I have read many over the years and I have to say this is one of the best. (also if someone can take a glance at my work that would be much appreciated)
Feb. 22, 2010 at 4:51 pm
you gave it the perfect title, i was really impressed with your choice of words,i cant wait for your next poem. thanks for your submission!!!
Shapphire10293 said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 6:39 pm
Wow, this is excellent.
Lyssa(: said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 5:45 pm
This is a cute poem(:
I like it.
lovebabylove. said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 1:59 pm
tthis is amazing(: i can tottaley releate. read me poems and tell me what you think.
alicecullen said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 1:38 pm
beautiful! i could definitely compare this to myself! please read my poems and stories because i really need feedback!
hip_nicole14 said...
Feb. 18, 2010 at 9:03 pm
i understand it for my farther is too protective(he wouldnt like near the stove for fear i moght burn myself) i think this is really good.
Lexi24 said...
Feb. 18, 2010 at 4:57 pm
Every time i read it i think of something new. i love this its amazing!! you changed the way i look at things
Powd3er said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 3:00 pm
I agree also
tenwords said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 2:44 pm
Enough said. That's all there is to is to say.
AngeliqueRaindrops said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 11:35 pm
This is amazing! :D
***3Lli3*** said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 2:51 pm
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Falling_Angel said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 2:07 am
OMG amazing!!! I loved it! plz if u see this please read my poem i wish and rate and comment on it id really love some feedback http ://teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/147125/I-Wish/
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