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Daddy's Womb MAG
April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.
So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.
i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.
The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.
i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.
i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.
© Anonymous
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SaKarias said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 9:14 am
I really liked this poem, it was so sensitive and dramatic. It was so realistic, the second verse was the one that really caught my attention. I really liked the rythm and the rhyme. Maybe you would like to check the grammar, but I hope you keep on writing. Because you just got yourself a new fan! :)
taylor_baby07 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 29 2012 at 8:30 pm
Loved it!!!! one of my favs!
Andrew121957 SILVER said...
on Sep. 26 2012 at 3:21 pm
Love<3 :D
sweetheart1998 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 23 2012 at 10:52 am
i really love this !
Prehistoric-Fool GOLD said...
on Sep. 22 2012 at 11:35 pm
That's a bit too harsh, but I do agree about the rhyme scheme... That one "as I gazed at the birdie" immediately deflated my original expectation of such a high rated poem.
Overall, however, I really like the way this poem conveyed what it wanted to say- and the message that came with it. Yes, it could have been better written, but it is still a good poem.
Overall, however, I really like the way this poem conveyed what it wanted to say- and the message that came with it. Yes, it could have been better written, but it is still a good poem.
Emily_Greene GOLD said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 5:17 pm
Very nice and from an innocent point of view.
JadaA said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 1:53 pm
this poem is awesome... it really made me think!
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on Sep. 19 2012 at 12:29 pm
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CelebrateDifferences said...
on Sep. 17 2012 at 9:39 pm
I agree with Miss_Lady, this poem makes you want to go on adventures!
shapeshifter56 GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2012 at 6:14 pm
We actually studied your poem in English class! How crazy is that? I was thinking, "I recognize this from somewhere...oh my gosh! It's from teenink!" Anyways, I love this poem. I didn't get it at first, but the more I read it, the more I like it. Great job!
I found this very imaginative and original. I love poems written this way. It makes me feel like a little girl again on an adventure, ready to do and try anything. I think that as we grow older we grow more cautious when sometimes we just need to take a big leap. This poem was very inspiring.
Dan.Kelly95 said...
on Sep. 14 2012 at 11:02 am
Ahh this was deep.
Kevin.leal95 said...
on Sep. 14 2012 at 10:51 am
TOTALLY!!!!!
feliciaannbro3 said...
on Sep. 14 2012 at 10:44 am
i know right !?!?!?!?!?!
Kevin.leal95 said...
on Sep. 14 2012 at 10:41 am
lyk OMG it touched my heart
feliciaannbro3 said...
on Sep. 14 2012 at 10:40 am
omg this was amazing! i love it <3
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