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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Nooneknowsme said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 2:06 am

This poem is so easy but very fantastic in the selection of words! Very nice! ;)

Keep it up!

Please guys check out my two works also, im sure you`ll like it!!

Check it out ;)

 

 
Blemons said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 9:17 pm
Interesting poem...I like the rhyme scheme. Anybody who reads this should look at my work! 
 
Agasaya said...
Mar. 1, 2012 at 9:12 am

Very well written. I would greatly appreciate someone--or everyon--to read my work and share your feelings about them.

THANKS!

 
lvamp1192 said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 12:16 pm
nice poem...
 
eddys96 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 8:00 pm
Wow this is good. Can you guys CHECK out my poem please? im new at this and wanna GROW little by little. So im in need of five star ratings.
 
NoLi123 said...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 10:21 pm
This was a very well written poem. I like the to-the-point style shown here; not excessively long, yet has its share of imagery. 
I recently started writing poetry of my own; could someone please read my poems and post some comments? 
 
Maddyw5 said...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 5:22 pm
Amazing. Just amazing. Keep up the good work!
 
Lashonti said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 6:46 pm
I heard/saw this poem somewhere else....
 
Felicia_The_Bestest replied...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 5:02 pm
What do you mean?
 
BabyBlue04 said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 10:29 am
This poem was awesome. I liked the flow! :)
 
eddys96 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2012 at 8:40 pm
this poem has good imagery. i like it
 
22711 said...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 7:04 pm
This is an awesome poem. I hope to get a lot of views and comments someday
 
Let-Love-In said...
Feb. 14, 2012 at 3:27 pm
I have no words. this is so beautiful and well written, the imagery is amazing and the flow is incredible. awesome job! definitely keep writing.
 
TheUntouchableShadow said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 2:53 pm
i like it alot! new favorite
 
vail09 said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:12 pm
that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?
 
BraxtonLangstonChapman said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 12:24 pm
This is really good and I want to get to this level, can someone judge some of my poetry and tell me something I need to work on.
 
vail09 replied...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:14 pm
ill do it if you wish. before hand i want to say..im not a rude person if i dont like something ill tell it easily
 
mikey'slover23 replied...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 4:29 pm
that waz a good poem.thanks it helps me out with my listening skills with my daddy xd
 
NickyJ said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:08 pm
We need more poetry like this floating around.
 
ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:40 pm
This was exremely well written and had great imagery.
 
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