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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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avarose101 said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 2:56 pm

i loved it. I could picture the whole story in my mind

 

 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:49 am
=)                                          
 
USCG13 said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 1:39 pm
Way to spe am the truth
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:37 am
Huh?                        
 
SpreadUrWingzNFly said...
Mar. 21, 2012 at 4:46 pm
Totally beautiful and fearless and powerful, simply amazing, I would love if read a few of my poems and gave me sone constructive criticism
 
NickyJ replied...
Mar. 21, 2012 at 7:15 pm
This poem is over 4 years old on this site. The author no longer views this. He doesn't see any comments or respond to any comments.

Don't expect anything from him or this poem.
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:36 am
Here I am.                     
 
NickyJ replied...
Mar. 24, 2012 at 12:26 pm

Carl H. = c.c.haynes? Didn't see that coming.

Surprise Surprise.

 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 24, 2012 at 7:28 pm
lol. Yeah. Unfortunately, TeenInk doesn't offer a space for middle-named folk like myself.
 
mwurzer4 said...
Mar. 19, 2012 at 2:18 pm
this is AMAZING! i can definitely relate
 
CharlesDickens replied...
Mar. 21, 2012 at 1:45 pm
Hrm... this sounds like a bedtime story for small children. It'snot horrible, but I don't understand why it's been the top rated poem for so many years.
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:42 am

Me neither. Just know that I'm humbled by it. "Bedtime story"...lol...that's funny. I think I will write a series of odd and horrifying bedtime story themed poems now. Thanks for the inspiration. I've been reading Aesop's Fables & the Grimm's lately anyway.

Carl

 
2Hearts1Dream said...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 4:05 pm
This is amazing, it gave me cold chills :D lol
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:49 am
lol                               
 
ImJustAGuy said...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 1:12 pm
Please check out my writing, im a new poet
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:50 am
I will.                                
 
ImJustAGuy replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 12:00 pm
ok thanks so much
 
Mossberg702 said...
Mar. 15, 2012 at 6:12 pm
 
Feelotes said...
Mar. 15, 2012 at 11:59 am
i understand..you are bound (by that chain)to your father's womb.Its a pure father-son love
 
Kalen-Bloodstone said...
Mar. 15, 2012 at 10:45 am
It seems you have enough comments, but it also seems that I have to say that this is a great poem :)
 
c.c.haynes replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 11:54 am
Thank you! ;P
 
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