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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Kim121819 said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 6:12 pm
HAVE YOU GUYS EVER WONDERED HOW THESE POEMS GOT SOOOOOO POPULAR? HOE IS IT SO POPULAR? I WRITE GOOD POEMS TOO!
 
swifthearth replied...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 12:09 pm

I sometimes ask myself the sameted of like us  question, but the fact is that these people all started off like us-Unnoticed.- They had to work there way to this level.

Ps. I also enjoy your work.

 
Kim121819 replied...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 3:55 pm
swifthearth, I would like to thank you, for your nice comment, and support. :)
 
Adam said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 9:16 am
This was a pretty cool and confusing story. My best friend drowned in a pond so it was a little sad that he say you will drown...
 
SassysGirl said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 8:56 am
 I think this poem is really good as it uses a lot of description and good detail. why didnt the sons father let him him, but he let him fly?
 
PRDGirl said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 8:40 am
I think it was  just great.
 
Jamie LeAnn G. said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 5:45 pm
That was  amazing! 
 
HannahLaRen said...
Nov. 12, 2011 at 4:54 pm
Amazing poem, very deep, I love your choice of words. great job.! 
 
Dreammer said...
Nov. 9, 2011 at 3:08 pm
Well written look at mine and comment please :) Oh yeah I'd like an honest opinion
 
DylanRock said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 5:36 pm
Good writing. Personally though, I didn't like it. I felt I couldn't relate to it but that's just me. Saying that, it was written well. Well done on its success here!
 
babygirl576 said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 12:43 pm
It doesnt make sense sorry, i like it, believe me i do, but it lost me half way through
 
ral97 said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 9:46 am
Wow this is AMAZING!! I love it. It really makes you think about it.
 
chris0911 said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 8:28 am
check out old dusty flag
 
DakotaShadow replied...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 2:47 pm
Stop doingthis
 
HoldingFast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 4:02 pm
Just to be honest guys, this is like my fave poem i've read on here. its amazing (: love it lots
 
Emmy88 said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 6:31 pm

He is trying to keep hime safe by keeping him chained letting him go thn tying him back

 

 
live.laff.love said...
Oct. 30, 2011 at 6:05 pm
this is verry intrestin..it makes me ponder
 
youngspeare said...
Oct. 30, 2011 at 1:17 pm
Great piece. 
 
ThePeaceDaisy said...
Oct. 30, 2011 at 12:31 am
How many times is this being posted????
 
Christina C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 28, 2011 at 11:42 pm
Simply amazing!!!!!!!!
 
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