Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on May. 10 2014 at 10:15 am
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I Feel sympathy with this poem and it's a great piece of work  

on May. 8 2014 at 9:21 am
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“All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost."
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I LOVE THIS!!!! I feel like this myself sometimes and you were able to establish an amazing connection with me through this piece. Keep writing and great job!

on May. 5 2014 at 6:22 pm
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"If you listen to the beat and hear what's in your soul, you'll never let anyone steal your rock 'n' roll." - Memphis: A New Musical

I appreciate the intense emotion of this piece - really creates a connection between reader and work. Good job!

on May. 2 2014 at 6:06 pm
Liv.Harris ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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"Let me glimpse inside your velvet bones." - Edgar Allan Poe

Love it! I really like the essence it gives. XD

on Apr. 30 2014 at 7:33 am
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Everything change, but changing does not.

Glamorous piece of work!

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on Apr. 28 2014 at 4:17 pm
Asfia SILVER, Hanover Park, Illinois
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"Dreams are like stars, you may never catch them but if you follow them they would lead you to destiny." ~Liam Payne

what happens in the end tell me please????

on Apr. 28 2014 at 2:08 pm
PoeticPrincess BRONZE, Jonesboro, Georgia
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"One moment of pleasure is not worth a million moments of pain."

Wow this was an amazing poem. Great job!

on Apr. 23 2014 at 5:54 pm
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A beautifully written piece. Love the idea of it. The whole poem comes together in the last few lines and I think i am in love with this poem. Keep it up

on Apr. 17 2014 at 1:45 pm
Hells_Will SILVER, Davenport, Washington
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"Wrists are for bracelets, not cutting" - Kellin Quinn

this is amazing!!!!!!! i love it!! i know how it feels to be held back by your parents but its my mom not my dad i dont really know my dad but thats why i love it sssooo much!!!! (sorry about my bad gramer!!)

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on Apr. 16 2014 at 2:44 pm
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“You've gotta dance like there's nobody watching,
Love like you'll never be hurt,
Sing like there's nobody listening,
And live like it's heaven on earth.”
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wow you did a great job!

on Apr. 11 2014 at 2:53 pm
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You're a rude person. 

on Apr. 10 2014 at 4:40 pm
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A certain darkness is needed to see the stars.

Sad but beautiful, as poetry usually is.

on Apr. 9 2014 at 9:23 pm
C.S.Thompson SILVER, Middletown, Connecticut
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This was a very cool piece to read. I enjoyed the use of imagery. It was little sad, the ending but that's alright because it was symbolic. Nice work.

on Apr. 7 2014 at 9:42 pm
juliamolly BRONZE, Bedford, New York
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It always works out in the end, if it didn't work out, its not the end.

Wow. I thought this was beautifuly written and the flow was really spectacular. That said, I think if you elongated this more you would have much more room for an emotional connection with the audience. (Me being very close with my father) Love this piece though and happy writing! 

on Apr. 7 2014 at 2:39 pm
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I hate poetry and school... alot

Like really this is just horrible i threw up a little in my mouth 

on Apr. 7 2014 at 2:29 pm
thatoneguythathateschool BRONZE, Jensen Beach, Florida
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I hate poetry and school... alot

This is horrible

on Apr. 6 2014 at 3:14 am
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Poetry is supposed to be interpreted based on how it makes you feel. What is your initial reaction to it? What does it make you think of? Does it spark something deep inside of you, make you stir a bit, make you ponder about it for a bit? Roll the poem around in your mind for a while, I'm sure you'll come to something.

on Apr. 5 2014 at 11:59 am
MilindaMiller BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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This is beautiful, I loved it!

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on Apr. 4 2014 at 9:46 pm
I hope you all enjoy my poems!

on Apr. 2 2014 at 1:24 pm
Kathryn Stone BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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Your word choice was amazing! Some of the rhyme was a little funky but it still worked really well.


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