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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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LexxRoseCom said...
Jun. 27, 2012 at 1:58 pm:
This is one of the most amazing pieces of work I have ever read on this site. I hope you continue to write, because you have a great talent and you should share it with the world.
 
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albinotiger said...
Jun. 23, 2012 at 8:09 pm:
I LOVED YOUR WORK!! the way that you tell the story is great! :)
 
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Mackenzie N. said...
Jun. 20, 2012 at 8:09 pm:
It was amazing, although the part i was confused about was and i was bound, btu it was amzing truley, dont stop ur an amazin writer...
 
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Shey22 said...
Jun. 6, 2012 at 6:24 am:
I thought this poem was very well versed and did the ryhming just right :) keep doin what your doin, cuz ur amazing :)
 
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Kenziemcm13 said...
Jun. 5, 2012 at 9:17 pm:
I liked it! Can you go check out some of my work I would be ever s grateful to hear what your opinions on them are! I would be honored for someone of your skill to read/rate comment on some of mine! :)
 
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LatinOthunduh said...
Jun. 5, 2012 at 11:57 am:
Very nice. Good work! :D
 
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HinataHyugaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 5, 2012 at 8:37 am:
Its really nice. I loved it
 
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Mia.T said...
Jun. 4, 2012 at 4:31 pm:
I liked this poem a lot! Nice work. =]
 
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Kenziemcm13 said...
May 31, 2012 at 1:35 am:
Loved it! PLEASE GO READ SOME OF MINE I WOULD BE HONORED! :)
 
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free2beme said...
May 28, 2012 at 2:25 pm:
amazing!!!!
 
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I like New Old World said...
May 24, 2012 at 1:32 pm:
I wish that my father had a womb that big
 
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sweetangel4life said...
May 21, 2012 at 4:47 pm:
sooo awesome and wonderfully written. wanna see more of your work
 
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ILuv2read101 said...
May 17, 2012 at 10:29 am:
i really love this poetry..i think you did a great job or more like awesome!
 
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crushed_veneer said...
May 16, 2012 at 9:59 am:
THIS IS AMAZING I love this, says so much in so little.
 
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thatkiddronnie said...
May 15, 2012 at 9:26 am:
It says a lot, Amazing Job!
 
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Krissy F. said...
May 14, 2012 at 12:50 pm:
The assonance and consonance in this poem is great! The pathetic fallacy makes this story very interesting!!
 
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NATLIN said...
May 14, 2012 at 12:38 pm:
Great job! One thing I really liked was how the piece rhymed all the way through. Also, the stanzas were great because they were in the perfect order and sequence.
 
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Ironandme said...
May 13, 2012 at 12:35 pm:
Great job! 
 
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MyBlissInChaos said...
May 13, 2012 at 12:43 am:
amazing, simply beautiful. :'D great job. keep writting!! :)
 
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maddyhatterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 10, 2012 at 6:39 pm:
still on top
 
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