Stop The Violence MAG

By Anonymous

   Drugs all over under the ground.
Guns, people crying, putting each otherdown.
People every day do crazy things.
Buying fancy cars and a lot ofrings.
You have nothing to show for yourself.
You're dying on the inside,and you have bad health.
I wonder what the community can do.
I have noidea, not even a clue.
I look in the paper and I see someone dead.
They layon the stretcher like it was a bed.
The mothers stand in silence.
Peopleshould think TO STOP THE VIOLENCE!!!



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jesus#7 said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 11:09 am
wats up kyler

on Jun. 9 2011 at 11:09 am
Very good, keep it up

on Jun. 9 2011 at 9:49 am
RanaHewezi1998 SILVER, Ames, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"I may not have gone where I intended to go, but I think I've ended up where I needed to be."
-Douglas Adams

awwww :( that truly makes me wnt to do a difference

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 9:24 am
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
17 articles 0 photos 130 comments

Favorite Quote:
You did let me go you left me broken and heartless, crying out for help, with no one to answer my calls-Shilpa Pierpont-Hale ( poem) Love hurts

This is a really good poem i wrote one just kind of like it. yeah what ever hapend tot he world? they call this the land of the free?

on Jun. 9 2011 at 8:09 am
K.M.S.Shear BRONZE, Cherokee, Iowa
2 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some people think writing is a waist of their time. For me it’s a way to draw an image of myself through the painting of words."

i agree nice wording

on Jun. 9 2011 at 12:11 am
Shabaka11 BRONZE, Tucson, Arizona
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thank you so much for saying that! I like the idea, though it's been somewhat beaten to death, but it seems so juvenile! C'mon, teenink, I understand we support everyone but this really isn't up to snuff.

reblep GOLD said...
on May. 18 2011 at 7:31 pm
reblep GOLD, Chester, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
the sun through my window, warming my skin...

this is so true. sad. but true. i really liked it

on May. 18 2011 at 11:08 am
samisback SILVER, Rock Hill, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.
I can sleep when I'm dead.
Are you an Air Force brat?

i completely agree with you, poems like this seem to pop up and rise to the top.

on Apr. 28 2011 at 1:54 pm
this is a great poem and i really believe u have potential to be a posotive writer and thanks for your input.

dnm ! said...
on Apr. 26 2011 at 12:10 pm
soooo truee

inspir3d GOLD said...
on Apr. 26 2011 at 8:03 am
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
11 articles 2 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

great message, and that's a cause that I'm very interested in personally. but i'm a little frustrated that poems like this can rise to the top so quickly just because the topic is a hot button in society. Quality oughta be the hot button on this site.

on Apr. 4 2011 at 9:05 pm
ilovedayna BRONZE, Story, Wyoming
3 articles 4 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
i love you

i have heard all of this several times, and i don't get why people think it's so great. i'm pretty sure you have heard all of this several times, in more or less words. the writing sounds mixed up and the words don't flow. i am thinking people are mostly just rating on what they agree with as far as the high rating goes.

on Apr. 4 2011 at 9:00 pm
ilovedayna BRONZE, Story, Wyoming
3 articles 4 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
i love you

i think you're headed the right direction with your writing, just bring it closer, describe more about what's going on. put yourself in it more. it sounds like you needed to jump into the situation more. Show your feelings and exaggerate some, too.

Pickles-29 said...
on Apr. 4 2011 at 5:16 pm
Pickles-29, Boise, Idaho
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This poem could use some work but keep trying.

Lahari GOLD said...
on Apr. 4 2011 at 4:31 pm
Lahari GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
19 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That\\\\\\\'s why its called the present.\\\\\\\"
— Eleanor Roosevelt

\\\\\\\"When life gives you lemons, make grape juice. Then sit back and watch as the world wonders how you did it.\\\\\\\'

This is poorly written, not sure why its in the Mag. The rhyming is just there. It doesn't add to the poem, it takes away from it. 

But. . keep trying though. :)


on Apr. 4 2011 at 11:30 am
Anasunny SILVER, Florissant, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Ours is not to reason why, ours is but to do or die.
~ Charge of the Light Brigade, Alfred Lord Tennyson

This was obviously a first draft, no offense, but improve the grammar and rhyme and I think it would be okay

on Apr. 4 2011 at 11:30 am
RideTheWave BRONZE, South Riding, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 30 comments

I agree with Liveinthemoment...

It was okay but i dont like it too much. something so serious should be portrayed seriously as well

 


on Mar. 13 2011 at 9:57 pm
FeelTheRomance18, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind, and therefore is winged cupid painted blind. -Lysander, A Midsummer Night's Dream

its OK... but I agree with LiveInTheMoment

on Mar. 13 2011 at 4:15 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

I personally don't love this poem. It reminds me of something somebody would do the morning the assignment was due. I also felt that the topic was serious, but the way it was delivered was childish. I felt as if you were mocking the subject.

on Feb. 19 2011 at 2:48 pm
Sabrina.Nichole SILVER, Pineville, Kentucky
8 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live your life as you wish, its like possessing a coin, you may spend it however you please; but you can only spend it once, so spend it wisely" - Thomas Kinworth

The message was great, but the rhyme scheme was only there to make the poem rhyme. That in my opinion takes away from the message, because of the low level diction and the incorrect word usage, just to make the poem rhyme. This poem has no emotion in it, it reminds me of a 6th grade essay or something. Im sorry but whoever wrote this really needs to search their heart and write about things that actually mean something to them so that the reader can feel passion from their work!


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