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Stop The Violence This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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   Drugs all over under the ground.
Guns, people crying, putting each otherdown.
People every day do crazy things.
Buying fancy cars and a lot ofrings.
You have nothing to show for yourself.
You're dying on the inside,and you have bad health.
I wonder what the community can do.
I have noidea, not even a clue.
I look in the paper and I see someone dead.
They layon the stretcher like it was a bed.
The mothers stand in silence.
Peopleshould think TO STOP THE VIOLENCE!!!


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StrangeJade This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 3:10 pm

I don't understand why this was in the magazine. Even if the poor grammar and wording were part of the style of the poem, that does not change the fact that it's badly written.

Some more perspective would have helped this immensely. As it is, the poem moves in forced stops and starts, and the message is shallow and clichéd.

 
ElleNicole replied...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 4:59 pm
Agreed.
 
Angie.Hudak This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 6:51 pm
Agreed. I mean, it's deff not terrible. But I think it's the best of what I've read on the website. Shouldn't have been put in the magazine, in my opinion.
 
NattyPie said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 4:52 pm

Did anyone ever think that maybe the grammar is part of the style of the poem?

 

 
NattyPie said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 4:49 pm
I like your style. The words stuck together reminded me of e.e. cummings a little bit. It's brilliant and I love the subject. I totally agree your perspective. Very insightful.
 
iLuvLife said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 3:58 pm
This is really nice; keep up the good work. Hope people read & learn from this. <3
 
spency said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:35 am
this is really nice
 
MLGBattleDiva said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:09 am
Very good, keep it up
 
jesus#7 said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:09 am
wats up kyler
 
MLGbattlediva said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:10 am

Thats not my real name, its cats.

 

 
MLGcougars said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:12 am
wats up MLGBATTLEDIVA
 
MLGBattlediva said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 11:14 am

The sky. Duhhh. I love burrtioes.

 

PS. Tacos are good too

 
RanaHewezi1998 said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 9:49 am
awwww :( that truly makes me wnt to do a difference
 
birdcage2 said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 9:24 am
This is a really good poem i wrote one just kind of like it. yeah what ever hapend tot he world? they call this the land of the free?
 
NattyPie replied...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 4:50 pm
I totally agree.
 
K.M.S.Shear said...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 8:09 am
i agree nice wording
 
reblep said...
May 18, 2011 at 7:31 pm
this is so true. sad. but true. i really liked it
 
sobeautiful101 said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 1:54 pm
this is a great poem and i really believe u have potential to be a posotive writer and thanks for your input.
 
dnm ! said...
Apr. 26, 2011 at 12:10 pm
soooo truee
 
inspir3d This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 26, 2011 at 8:03 am
great message, and that's a cause that I'm very interested in personally. but i'm a little frustrated that poems like this can rise to the top so quickly just because the topic is a hot button in society. Quality oughta be the hot button on this site.
 
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