Stop The Violence This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

   Drugs all over under the ground.
Guns, people crying, putting each otherdown.
People every day do crazy things.
Buying fancy cars and a lot ofrings.
You have nothing to show for yourself.
You're dying on the inside,and you have bad health.
I wonder what the community can do.
I have noidea, not even a clue.
I look in the paper and I see someone dead.
They layon the stretcher like it was a bed.
The mothers stand in silence.
Peopleshould think TO STOP THE VIOLENCE!!!

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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BerryKATHERINE said...
Jun. 30, 2012 at 7:16 am
If you are in not good state and have got no cash to get out from that point, you will need to receive the business loans. Just because it would aid you unquestionably. I take financial loan every time I need and feel myself good just because of this.
Maya M. said...
Jun. 17, 2012 at 3:47 pm

i like this,great idea


Meashka_baby said...
Jun. 7, 2012 at 9:41 am
Oh my God this is an AMAZING poem, I've been writing poetry ever sience I could hold a pencle and you can go far with this poetry trust me, I should know :)
StarGazer9 replied...
Jun. 24, 2013 at 4:31 pm
Wait, i clicked on your profile and it says you wrote this... are you patting yourself on the back by posting that comment?
Anon replied...
Aug. 30, 2013 at 1:59 pm
She didn't write it. Read the page and her profile carefully first please.
Tornado M. replied...
Aug. 30, 2013 at 2:01 pm
Actually, that just indicates her favourite work which another person wrote. Why she would favourite this, I do not know...
thewriter19 said...
May 26, 2012 at 9:07 am
In order to become a better have to give very constructive critism and point out both negitives and positives. Poetry within itself is self expression. But the best poets became the inspiration to future thinkers. By giving dishonost critism it just limits potental
thewriter19 said...
May 26, 2012 at 9:04 am
Well. I wasn't a big fan of this one because the words are so simple and uneducated. The rhymes are forced and lack realism. However, it is direct and clear...and you work the simple rhyme sceme to your benifit annoymous. But I am quite supprized that this poem was picked to be number one. It doesn't really make me think about anything. The message is one sided and lacks deeper meaning. What I think that you can make this better is to change the words to a more natural rhyme pattern and use meta... (more »)
Tornado M. replied...
Aug. 29, 2013 at 7:11 pm
Ah-ha! Definitely agree with that. :D
writer5 said...
May 4, 2012 at 4:04 pm
to the author of this poem: when i said that about opinoins i didn't mean you! i pressed "new comment" accidently instead of reply, so i was addressing someone with a negative comment. you poem sends a good message!
ArexYouxReady said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 1:14 pm
This is wonderful.  I think that the concept is an everyday topic that everyone can relate to.  You presented your topic in a clear and concise way that left me thinking.  It also left me feeling as if I need to do something, which is good as that's what work should do: inspire people.
K@Tchandler said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 11:48 am

wow, i really liked your poem! You should check  some of my work out.Like my always love at home poem. I think you will like it. I might be wrong about this, but your poem told me that you write about important stuff in the world,just like i do. Please write back :)


snowleopard100 said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 8:23 am
This is a great concept to write about, and you did it in a nice, clear way. Nevertheless, the wording used should be heavily considered as well as the flow of the poem.
Mayz_ said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 7:28 am
This poem is really good, and idont blame you for the spelling mistakes because when i published my poems, the actual website made spelling mistakes. So Yeah Really Amazing <3 
gdsgfewhjfwe said...
Mar. 21, 2012 at 2:14 pm
i think thatyou could have done abetter job woth yourspelling. Word.
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Let-Love-In said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 8:11 pm
i do think the concept and idea is very well done, however it was a bit choppy and that did take away from it. but not bad. 
booklover272 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:39 pm
Next time work on your grammer and proof read! But topic and a good poem.
JosephEdward said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 11:26 am
Great idea! It could improve in grammer, and word choice.
HPRGSuperFan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 1, 2013 at 5:34 pm
I completely agree! Good start, though:)
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