Stop The Violence

great poem i really like it. if you guys cud please check out mine :)

Houses are expensive and not every person can buy it. Nevertheless, credit loans was created to help different people in such hard situations.

 omg i love tjis. i think the same thing but i dont see aanyone tryna do anythign to stop it.

i loved it

Was it meant to have no spaces in between some words or was that a grammar mistake?

Nice poem. A couple of grammar mistakes need to be corrected, though, and I think the poem's rhyme sceme is a little off (last two lines are different in syllable length). Otherwise, it's alright.

Great poem, a thumb up for the topic, but I pray the editors fixed the grammar.

good idea, but it was very un expressive. Plus, I feel like it an like you did the usauly over use, voilence is not answer poetry trope. It was unorginal, however not the bigest problem. most writing aren't. but on top of being unorginal, it was poorly exucate and boring. Over all this is a first draft, not really a finish product. Reach beyong the norm, and try to do a different spend. But, keep writing.

I like this poem because it is something they have seen or lived with their whole life. Sometimes you need a simple poem once in a while to show innocence, and to help others understand. Love it.

I don't understand why this poem was published in the magazine. I'm not a good writer, but even I could have thought up something better.

1. The rhyming was cliched. I've heard "ground" and "down" rhymed together many times. It wasn't even used in an imaginative way. Nothing was particularly interesting about the poem, but at least it was short. I've also heard fancy cars and mentions of jewelry to describe wealth too often, as if that's the only thing the rich buy.

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If you are in not good state and have got no cash to get out from that point, you will need to receive the business loans. Just because it would aid you unquestionably. I take financial loan every time I need and feel myself good just because of this.

i like this,great idea

 

Oh my God this is an AMAZING poem, I've been writing poetry ever sience I could hold a pencle and you can go far with this poetry trust me, I should know :)

In order to become a better writer...you have to give very constructive critism and point out both negitives and positives. Poetry within itself is self expression. But the best poets became the inspiration to future thinkers. By giving dishonost critism it just limits potental

Well. I wasn't a big fan of this one because the words are so simple and uneducated. The rhymes are forced and lack realism. However, it is direct and clear...and you work the simple rhyme sceme to your benifit annoymous. But I am quite supprized that this poem was picked to be number one. It doesn't really make me think about anything. The message is one sided and lacks deeper meaning. What I think that you can make this better is to change the words to a more natural rhyme pattern and use meta... (more »)

to the author of this poem: when i said that about opinoins i didn't mean you! i pressed "new comment" accidently instead of reply, so i was addressing someone with a negative comment. you poem sends a good message!

This is wonderful.  I think that the concept is an everyday topic that everyone can relate to.  You presented your topic in a clear and concise way that left me thinking.  It also left me feeling as if I need to do something, which is good as that's what work should do: inspire people.