Silent Sonnet

June 2, 2009
By kmvalencia BRONZE, La Mesa, California
kmvalencia BRONZE, La Mesa, California
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The rooms echoed of your laughter today,
Yet my ears are begging to hear your voice.
I see the sand we stood upon that day,
Where we joined the cool smooth ocean by choice.
I'm waiting to hear the rush of the waves
The bubbling foam and the stirring sea.
Waiting to hear the warning the wind says
of how I'm losing you unexpectedly.
I'm waiting to hear your smile widen,
The butterflies of your stomach knocking.
Waiting to hear my heart and soul tighten
And to hear you say my name and talking.
My ears have betrayed me and lost every sound
Please promise you will still stay around.



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on Jan. 14 2014 at 11:25 am
LifeLeader PLATINUM, Roanoke, Virginia
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This is really written well!

on Dec. 11 2012 at 5:19 pm
writergirly GOLD, Preston, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"You never know how strong you are, until being strong is the only choice you have."
- Anonymous

I like how you've done it entirely from the perspective of hearing. It gives a new take on how we approach life, not just wiht sight, but with all our senses.

kat27 GOLD said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 4:43 pm
kat27 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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cute is all i have to say. gah why do these comments have to be 10 characters or more? sooooo cute cute cute.

on Aug. 28 2010 at 11:49 am
SamiLynn PLATINUM, Anthem, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"The unexamined life is not worth living." ~Socrates

I've always loved sonnets, but sometimes they lose meaning for the rhyme nand rhythm. But this is wonderful! I love the imagery and the emotion.

kmvalencia said...
on May. 10 2010 at 2:20 pm
Thanks for the comments everyone!! :) 

on May. 10 2010 at 10:14 am
babymama888 SILVER, Shaker Heights, Ohio
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wow. that was just amazing, one of my favorites! i love poems like this. 

on Mar. 27 2010 at 3:31 pm
lbbarlow125 DIAMOND, Yonkers, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Veni Vedi Vici"

really really good

 


on Mar. 5 2010 at 10:39 am
respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
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Favorite Quote:
There is a natural law in life to settle.....I broke that law ~Katherine Hepburn
Love, Is the severest of mental diseases~U.K.
Spinning always spinning....when life puts me down I'll give you a call~respecturself7

really great.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 10:41 pm
asian7art SILVER, Basalt, Colorado
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This is the bomb. I <3 it so much!

on Jan. 20 2010 at 6:53 pm
Ashleykimiko BRONZE, Honolulu, Hawaii
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"Waiting to hear the warning the wind says

of how I'm losing you unexpectedly."

great line! very beautiful sonnet! great job!!

on Jan. 20 2010 at 3:26 pm
Thanks for this one mate, Saved me a lot of time on my english homework;]

Hope you don't mind.

jimmy_a GOLD said...
on Dec. 29 2009 at 2:10 am
jimmy_a GOLD, Sanford, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Look for me, not with a flashlight but open your heart n free your soul n there my love i shall be

wow im at a lost for words that was amazing ur very talented great sonnet :)

azure said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 9:43 am
Power sonnet, especially the imagery. I'll remember "hear your smile widen" and "butterflies of your stomach knocking." As critics say, "haunting."

on Sep. 7 2009 at 5:18 am
kmvalencia BRONZE, La Mesa, California
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Thank You! :) I love the comment

Art Teach said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 2:46 am
I loved this Karissa - I am very impressed. It is very visual and touching. Beautiful choice of words.


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