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The Mountains And The Seas

June 2, 2013
By Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes


I told you that for you,
I would move the mountains.
I told you,
That I would tear down the skies.
I told you,
That you could move the seas.
That you could move the seas.

I'll move the mountains for you,
If you'll move the seas for me.
Together we are better,
I'm better next to you.

I'll move the mountains for you,
I'll move the mountains for you,
I'll move the mountains for you,
If you'll move the seas.

Together we are better,
Together we will,
Move the mountains and the seas.
We'll move the mountains and the seas,
We'll move the mountains and the seas,
We'll move the mountains and the seas,
Together.

Together we are better,
Together we are better,
Together we'll move the mountains and the seas.
The mountains and the seas.


The author's comments:
This is my first song. I hope it's good!

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on Jun. 22 2013 at 9:33 am
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

Okay, thanks, Lexus!

on Jun. 22 2013 at 12:08 am
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hello, my friend! I am not a songwriter so I probably shouldn't give tips on how to write one. I enjoy the concept and the title, but it seemed like it got repetitive. The first two stanzas(?), I don't know what they are called in songs, are good and I think they should be kept. I think they should actually be reversed so that the second one is actually the beginning of the song and I think that the one that starts 'I told you that for you' should be the chorus. Now, you have the title, the beginning, and the chorus. So, I think you should continue with the nature-esque feel and try to pick up some other stuff to add into the song to go after the beginning and between the chorus. Maybe two more stanzas(?). It will go beginning (second stanza that you have right now), a new stanza that you come up with, chorus, another new stanza that you come up with, and then end with the chorus repeated. (OR after you do the chorus repeated you could add a two lined stanza to end it.) Now, again, I am no songwriter, but I tried! Overall, I think this has potential and I like where it's going. Good luck and I hope I helped!

on Jun. 10 2013 at 10:42 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

Okay, thanks!

on Jun. 10 2013 at 10:41 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Not in love with it, but for your first poem it was pretty good :) just think its missing something.