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Drift Away

April 21, 2012
By JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
23 articles 5 photos 28 comments

The heat of your skin
Your red lips tremble softly
Your eyes drift away

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on May. 11 2012 at 12:02 pm
iCheeto PLATINUM, Cape Coral, Florida
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I really like the whole poem :)  Nice job.

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on Apr. 30 2012 at 8:52 am
deleted, Miami, Florida
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Doesn't flow as nicely or feel as complete as your other haikus, but it's still nice.

on Apr. 28 2012 at 10:22 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I think the first line didn't fit in this the two last lines. I'm like, "What's with the heat of his skin?" Anyway, I know it's not that easy to write a haiku. Anyway, keep writing. :)))