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The Beach

April 19, 2012
By JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
23 articles 5 photos 28 comments

The quick waves crash by
The bright moon glows in the dark
Sand crawls beneath me

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on Apr. 30 2012 at 8:52 am
deleted, Miami, Florida
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I really like this one. The ocean's my haven, and this is a perfect description! :)

on Apr. 29 2012 at 3:24 pm
CountryPopGirl PLATINUM, Lawrenceville, New Jersey
38 articles 16 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You love someone, you open yourself up to suffering, that's the sad truth. Maybe they'll break your heart, maybe you'll break their heart and never be able to look at yourself in the same way. Those are the risks. The thought of losing so much control over personal happiness is unbearable. That's the burden. Like wings, they have weight, we feel that weight on our backs, but they are a burden that lifts us. Burdens which allow us to fly..."
-Dr. Jack Hodgins (Bones)

When I read this, I get a clear image in my mind and I feel like I am actually at the beach

on Apr. 28 2012 at 2:02 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
16 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

The imagery here is fantastic...I even feel the "beachy" climate. Well done.

on Apr. 24 2012 at 7:28 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

Nice imagery here in such a short piece of writing; I also really like how it can be interpreted mayn different ways and doesn't have a set meaning

on Apr. 24 2012 at 9:44 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

You've really set the scene in this haiku. I particularly liked the last line: "Sand crawls beneath me."

on Apr. 22 2012 at 6:03 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 351 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

This is a really great haiku! I second everything that the others are saying. Great descriptive words! I hope you put some more work on here so we can read it! :)

on Apr. 22 2012 at 5:40 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

this was really good i loved it 

on Apr. 22 2012 at 11:08 am
Smile-And-Wave-Boys. SILVER, Rotherhithe, Other
8 articles 1 photo 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone wants to ride with you in the limo, but what you want is someone who will take the bus with you when the limo breaks down."
— Oprah Winfrey

I can only repeat what others say. It's amazing how such a simplistic poem can convey so much. Well done!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 22 2012 at 4:40 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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very good imagery in three lines. :)  great work and keep writing XD !!

on Apr. 22 2012 at 2:30 am
JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
23 articles 5 photos 28 comments
Thank you very much :)

on Apr. 22 2012 at 12:21 am
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

I love the vivid imagery you use in this haiku!  Your way of describing the scene, "quick waves", "bright moon", really brings the scene to life.  Keep up the great work!  I have no criticisms.

on Apr. 20 2012 at 3:39 pm
JessicaQ PLATINUM, North Vancouver, British Columbia, Other
23 articles 5 photos 28 comments
Hope you guys like it!