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"Family First"

December 12, 2016
By carleerizzo BRONZE, New City, New York
carleerizzo BRONZE, New City, New York
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You love your

Family and always put them first
But the mistake
You made is
Being greedy and believing
You had it all and you had every
Single thing you wanted without taking an aerial
View of the people around you and realizing their feelings. A mental photo
Of your family, click, and notice their expressions of
Sadness. They could be anywhere
In the world but they chose to be with you, which shows
How much love they have for you and how you are the
Life of the family. No matter what you do they will roll
With it and love you. Of
Course they will always love you, but you have to think of the
Possibilities of their sadness. Like sagebrush
With it sharp edges poking at their hearts over and over
Again because of all the pain and hurt you caused them. The
Eye may never be able to tell their real feelings, but they are signed
All over with these depressing feelings, like being left alone in the desert
Abandoned by you in the valley.
They might show symptoms
Of sadness but they would never let you know their true emotions of
Despair. A
Thought to ponder,  slow
And steady, Are you making your parents proud? The Setting
Can help you, but make sure your family,in darkness, is your sun.


The author's comments:

We had to write an enjambment poem for class and I really liked the structure. I approached this poem by writing the actual “Finding Idaho” poem first on every line. I didn’t really know what I wanted to write about because the assignment was so open ended. I started with “you love your family” and then the thoughts kept coming. Once I had an idea, I wanted to convey to readers to not take their family for granted because they love you and will do anything for you. This structure of enjambment helped to create the point because it created one flowing thought. In revision, I tried to change words to something different and better. I also just tried to make everything flow better. I hope readers will feel my emotion and not take their parents for granted.


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