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Energy

December 31, 2014
By itsyourmaingirl SILVER, Flint, Texas
itsyourmaingirl SILVER, Flint, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 14 comments

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Show me a family of readers and I will show you the people who will change the world.


I refill my glass everyday.

I fill it all the way to the top.

It's filled with energy to pass away.

I wish I could keep it all to myself.

The days pass and I keep filling it less.

My eyes drop and so does my smile.

Will I have to confess?

Will I have to say what's really going on?

 

I need to take a break.

I need to refill it all the way to the top.

Life's to short to be fake.

But, people keep asking me to go places.

I begin to have a short fuse.

I can't handle myself.

How can I refuse?

How can I make myself take a break?

 

Finally, people just stop asking.

I dont know rather to be happy or sad.

All the sudden, my cofidence starts lacking.

Is there anyway I can ever be able to win?

My glass filled all the way to the top once more,

after I took a short break for myself.

My eyes got brighter; but it was quite a bore

when I realized it was about to begin again.



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on Feb. 16 2015 at 5:09 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

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[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

I think the form and format are very nice, but this would have been better without the rhyming effort. However, it is very nice.

on Jan. 26 2015 at 4:45 pm
CaseyChickenWang SILVER, McDonough,
7 articles 2 photos 89 comments

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"No one likes half-jinglers! Jingle all the way!" - Shelley McNeight
"You don't get what you deserve, you get what you negotiate." - GSUMUN

I love how you use the glass analogy, very excellent poem. I also love how the words roll off my tongue so easily :) Nice work.

on Jan. 22 2015 at 9:52 pm
teacuppoetry GOLD, Lancashire, Other
15 articles 1 photo 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
The world is full of obvious things which nobody by any chance ever observes- Sherlock Holmes

I love the poem, it's a great representation of an internal struggle. There were a few grammatical errors but what really matters is the message! x

Redolvene GOLD said...
on Jan. 22 2015 at 6:17 pm
Redolvene GOLD, Sunny, Florida
10 articles 1 photo 33 comments
Your poem is super relatable and conveys great emotion. My only suggestion is to make sure you don't use the same words repeatedly. Try finding synonyms to replace words like "fill" and "refill". Other than that, nice work.

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Jan. 22 2015 at 11:35 am
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

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I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

I love this! I'm guessing you're an introvert. ;) My favorite lines are: " I need to refill it all the way to the top./ Life's to short to be fake." Great job!

KaavyaM SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2015 at 12:30 pm
KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
9 articles 1 photo 47 comments

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To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.

This is a lovely poem, and so well thought out! I love the metaphor. It's a really relatable poem, and somehow, really pretty. If I had to nit-pick, I'd say maybe pay a little more attention to grammar; for example, lacking is used as a verb here, when really, it should be used an adjective meaning deficient.

on Jan. 9 2015 at 11:04 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

STOP, DROP, READ. It sounds like someone needs another vacation XD. Naw, it was very good and I'm gonna rate this. Good job, bby girl.

on Jan. 4 2015 at 8:11 am
BoobooBeetle DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
74 articles 1 photo 36 comments

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“A good novel tells us the truth about its hero; but a bad novel tells us the truth about its author.”
G.K. Chesterton

"And you, you ridiculous people, you expect me to help you."
Denis Johnson

Loved the cycle and the rhythm kept within it. I also like how realistic and relatable it is. How, I only have one thing, and that's to make it longer. Other than that, it was absolutely beautiful! :)

on Jan. 4 2015 at 2:15 am
MatchaJasmine BRONZE, Delhi, Other
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Beautiful poem! I love the idea of the poem which emphasizes new beginnings. Good job!