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Broken By Words

May 19, 2014
By Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"


In my mind
Your words replay
A broken record of syllables

That collide in supernovas
Giving birth to black holes
That feed on my emotions

Until my heart is shattered
Like a window in a storm
Erupting in a furious dance

Shards cascade in deadly arcs
Only to fall useless
The floor’s glittering teardrops

I try to gather the pieces
But a shard cuts my finger
Weeping blood among the tears


The author's comments:

When i was eight i asked my dad why he loved my brother more (i am adopted). He replied,"because he was here first" These few words broke my little eight-year old heart


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on Jul. 31 2014 at 6:32 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

i know about the arc part, it makes me mad every time i see it and thank you so much! that means a lot to me <3

on Jul. 25 2014 at 9:57 pm
Rebecca97 BRONZE, Gainesville, Florida
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This is a supremely lovely poem, born out of pain as you stated, but lovely for it. However, because I am at heart a complete grammar nazi, I feel the need to point out that it should either be "Shards cascade in a deadly arc" or "Shards cascade in deadly arcs". I mean no offense and obviously this is free form poetry (very well-done free form poetry) I just couldn't help but to pass along that little tid-bit, because I'm constantly finding similar things in my own writing. (Proof-checking is evil). Anyway, I love the poem and I really appreciate that you are so open to reading/commenting on other people's work without even expecting anything in return. So, to cut an extremely wordy comment short--I love the poem and what you do on this site. =)

on Jul. 18 2014 at 2:09 am
bookmaniac PLATINUM, Issaquah, Washington
41 articles 18 photos 9 comments
This is such a wonderful poem, and I'm sorry your inspiration for it was so sad :( With this poem, you've turned pain into art, and that is so inspirational. Never give up and keep writing!

on Jul. 11 2014 at 11:50 am
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
7 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated" By- Dr. Maya Angelou

I like this a lot. Your emotions in this poem are powerful and its what pulled me in to finish reading the rest. Great Work!

jolo said...
on Jul. 3 2014 at 9:00 am
wow this is great

on Jun. 14 2014 at 2:51 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

Wow, thank you

on Jun. 14 2014 at 6:01 am
WickedDreamer PLATINUM, Salem, Other
30 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
The legacy you leave is the one you live

Your words show me that you're hurt. But I think, you are enough for yourself to conquer all the joy in the world. :)

on May. 31 2014 at 10:03 am
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

yes i am quite loved and thank you^^

on May. 31 2014 at 8:32 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
5 articles 0 photos 266 comments
Beautifully written and heartfelt. Such a sad story, I hope you're happy and loved now :)

on May. 26 2014 at 9:55 am
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

thank you soo much!^^

HudaZav SILVER said...
on May. 25 2014 at 9:42 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 392 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

Wow, beautiful yet heartrending poem. I've been reading your poems, you really have a special talent. So keep writing!

on May. 24 2014 at 3:04 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

thnx i'm glad u appreciate it^^

vanka BRONZE said...
on May. 24 2014 at 3:02 pm
vanka BRONZE, Varansi, Alaska
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live life happily until death comes to you and says"dude wanna hangout"

So soryy fr wat happened with you...bt u sure hv expressed ur feelings through your poem...appreciate that;);)

on May. 24 2014 at 2:57 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

thank u and don't worry i have forgiven my dad^^

on May. 24 2014 at 2:56 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

thank you so much!!! u hav no idea what this means to me

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 23 2014 at 10:55 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Beautiful words, heart-wrenching story. Nevertheless, you are a brilliant writer, and I hope you keep writing. Never give up :)

on May. 23 2014 at 10:26 pm
HedaBecca SILVER, Westfield, Indiana
8 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is weakness. Weakness is death. The dead are gone. The living are hungry. Feed them our fears and watch as they choke." - Tumblr

Love the emotion and imagery, sorry about what it is based on though :(