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My Love

April 14, 2014
By MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener


My love, why you?
I deserve this death,
this pain belongs to me.

I did wrong.
I broke the rules,
and now it's time to pay.

I am guilty as charged.
The penalty for my sin
is death.

My love, what are you doing?
You are innocent!
Never have you done a wrong.

Your blood soaks the ground,
where mine should be.
I'll make up for it with tears.

My love, where are you going?
For I want to be there.
Let me die with you!

You died for me.
You set me free.
You are my life.

My love, is that you?
You are alive!
My love is alive!


The author's comments:
Jesus is my love. Not my only love, but my greatest.

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MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2014 at 11:04 am
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

Thank you so much, I really appreciate the positive feedback. :)

on Oct. 24 2014 at 5:48 pm
Angelique_h GOLD, Bradenton, Florida
11 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We cry, not because we are weak, but because we have been strong for too long."

This is amazing! It shows the truly emotional and sad perspective of a christian that most people just don't understand! You clearly conveyed your topic and did so in a way that almost resolved me to tears. This is a very rare talent. Excellent Work!  

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Sep. 14 2014 at 10:07 pm
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

Thank you!

on Sep. 14 2014 at 3:00 pm
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
7 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated" By- Dr. Maya Angelou

This is a truly beautiful piece! <3

on May. 31 2014 at 11:36 pm
sullivano17 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
23 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can't make up anything anymore. The world itself is a satire. All you're doing is recording it. - Art Buchwald

I like the way you hinted at the sacrifices for love. a little heavy on the exclamation points, but i like it overall(:

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on May. 31 2014 at 11:59 am
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

Oops, I definitely spelled criticism wrong.

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on May. 31 2014 at 11:57 am
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

No, that is completely fine. Any helpful critizm is welcome. Thank you!

on May. 30 2014 at 11:48 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
5 articles 0 photos 266 comments
Beautiful :) my only critisizm (I'm sorry, I know I'm annoying) is that maybe exclamation marks are overused? Sorry...

on May. 27 2014 at 4:15 pm
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
6 articles 6 photos 183 comments

Favorite Quote:
Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

Beautifully written! I love it :)