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Serenade the Empty Sound MAG

November 15, 2008
By Anonymous

A low buzz
the buildings at work
a soft beat
as the clock ticks away
I shouldn’t be here
yet I’m forced to stay
like cattle they herd us in
prisoners of few mistakes
we sit in silence
wait ’til day breaks
one gets caught
he disappears
with a lady in sharpened heels
people pass by
but we go unseen
hidden in shadows that mourn
but in this place
so toweringly large
their yells are like whispers
thrown empty to space
outside they’re dancing
outside they sing
they don’t hear the silence echo
and the emptiness ring
they begin to read
voices in unison
like a chant
turned evil by spell
magic is murder
and deceit is dear
maybe this will go over well
but if by chance I fade so far
nobody would know
there’d be no one to tell
let them know it’s Heaven I found
and refused my entry to Hell

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on Aug. 20 2010 at 8:35 pm
cupcake420 BRONZE, Hdj, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
THe best thing you can do for the person you love is to let them go .. and if they come back then you know i was ment to be :)

i seconed that......

on Aug. 20 2010 at 6:40 pm
Soccer33 SILVER, Niwot, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
It takes determination to win, but to be a true soccer player you must have true passion for the game.

great job i loved the ryhme sceem.. i sort of wish i could write like that!!!


on Jul. 29 2010 at 6:24 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

the rhyme scheme keeps the reader going... good job, read mine?

zobo929 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 7 2010 at 9:58 am
zobo929 BRONZE, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"If you feel like a mouse in a pack of ostriches call your mom because you no she will say she loves you"
-Zoie Williams

this is really good and the thruth i can totally relate

on Jun. 2 2010 at 8:15 pm
Smarty638 BRONZE, South Dennis, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
" all you have been told at school or church or in any book, dismiss whatever insults your soul and your very flesh shall be a great poem."

this is great! thanks for reading  mine too :) but really...i think everyone can relate to this..i know i can! and thats the best kind of poetry!

on May. 17 2010 at 4:43 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."

Just... wow.  That's talent.

on May. 10 2010 at 5:08 pm
ThatOneWritingGirl PLATINUM, Greenwood Village, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.
Love Always. :)
When the tides of life turn against you and the current upsets your boat, don't waste time and tears on what might have been, just lie on your back and float.

This is truly amazing. You're so talented! I enjoyed reading it! Keep up the good work! You've got a talent as a writer! Check out some of my work? Thanks! Yours get 5 stars from me!!

holycrackers said...
on Feb. 28 2010 at 7:00 pm
wow! deep i've never felt that kind of intense vipe in a poem before

on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:21 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

wow your poem is very powerful

love the title as well

great job

plzz read my workk??

on Feb. 11 2010 at 12:35 pm
BlackMoonWhiteSky PLATINUM, Cedar Park, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Thus is life, live it, or die trying!

Very cool, it has a nice rythm.

on Jan. 20 2010 at 7:37 pm
katielynn21 DIAMOND, Sierra Vista, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
live as if you'll die tomorrow, dream as if you'll live forever

this was simply astonishing, this poem took my breath away. If you ever have a free moment i would like to here your comentary on some of my poems.

emilyj93 GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 5:45 pm
emilyj93 GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
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wow I'm speechless from this poem. I love your style of writing. I would love to hear some of your feedback for my poems if you ever have time!

cduke SILVER said...
on Dec. 29 2009 at 7:00 pm
cduke SILVER, Overland Park, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Don't cry because its over. Smile because it happened.

That was amazing. I felt like I was really there. It seemed like the world just stopped for a moment, and that moment in time was still, except for the noise. I loved it so much! amazing work :)

Prd101 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 29 2009 at 12:14 am
Prd101 BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
life's too short not to live

I completely agree! Excelent job, I truely loved it!

MFrancik said...
on Dec. 7 2009 at 8:04 pm
Wow, this is truly incredibly. As I began reading it, I found myself sucked into the rhythm of your words and imagery, even though I didn't fully understand how it all came together until the very end. I love the will and strength in this poem, great job!

krzykrys GOLD said...
on Dec. 7 2009 at 6:01 pm
krzykrys GOLD, Baldwinsville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
i have many favorite quotes

yea its great! congrats, your an awesome writer. . mayb could look at some of mine one time and give me some pointers.

on Dec. 6 2009 at 9:03 pm
Hallieinthewings GOLD, Bartlett, Illinois
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Thank you everyone for the encouraging feedback. I love reading and writing poetry; if you ever would like me to look at any of your own writings, let me know ;)

on Nov. 15 2009 at 10:38 am
francheeze88 SILVER, Oak Park, Illinois
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AMAZING, this is absolutely AMAZING

on Nov. 15 2009 at 10:15 am
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow. This is absolutley outstanding. You have some tremendous writing talents. Your imagery was very captivating. Never stop writing :P

Maxine SILVER said...
on May. 24 2009 at 1:24 pm
Maxine SILVER, Hays, Kansas
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this poem is awsome..