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Just Live

March 27, 2014
By Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello


No choice
No voice
No chance

Born
Into darkness
You grow
Unconsciously
You know

The earth
It moves to your will
You shape one another
Earth and sand
Constant death
And rebirth
Old peels back to new

What
Have you done
The sky burns
Your shining light
Your looming fright
You move too fast
Not knowing
What is right

Seeds fall
The earth you knew
Now from hence
Young call
From behind the walls
Where have they gone
Where is the love
Of the once pretty flowers
Living to live for life

Petals break away
Like pollen
Upon the wind
Empty
Just another need of life
Yet now you see
The earth now rises
To meet your stare
This world is more
Than seeds and honey

Let it go
Spill out
The golden nectar
Smooth and sweet
Forgotten with the moment
But the taste
Is what fills the moon
As you reach for the sky

What awaits
The hungry flower
Hungry for light
And hungry
For the
Bright
That gives
The strength
To carry on



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This article has 11 comments.


on Apr. 24 2014 at 7:37 pm
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 437 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart."

Wow! Very...amazing!

on Apr. 19 2014 at 3:05 pm
CrowOfRuination PLATINUM, Lawrence, Kansas
38 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
You cannot be lonely if you like the person you're alone with. -Wayne Dyer
Leading those who have followed a greater leader without knowing what it is you are doing is the same as wielding a sword against a master of weapons. -Kreepy

You are very creative with your wording and the depth you have put into this piece is spactacular. It really makes the reader think and see through the eyes of the writer and really pulls the meaning through with your vivid wording. You make it so elegant yet simple for everyone to understand. Even with this being the first piece of yours I've read you are already becoming a favorite. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

on Apr. 19 2014 at 2:41 pm
BilliJoBaumann SILVER, Anaconda, Montana
6 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life may have limits, but you can always exceed them."-Billi Jo Baumann

No words can explain how great this poem is!

on Apr. 19 2014 at 12:55 am
jacey_poo BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
3 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
never judge a book by its cover

This is just wonderful, the description, the stanza how it's structured it's really well done

Nobuo GOLD said...
on Apr. 18 2014 at 8:48 pm
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello

thank you so much

on Apr. 18 2014 at 11:58 am
Nerdydragon SILVER, Wichita, Kansas
9 articles 14 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Demons run when a good man goes to war
Night will fall and drown the sun
When a good man goes to war

Friendship dies and true love lies
Night will fall and the dark will rise
When a good man goes to war

Demons run, but count the cost
The battle's won, but the child is lost”
― Steven Moffat

Beautiful... I love this. Very fanastic format!

Nobuo GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2014 at 1:30 pm
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello

Yeah, with punctuation, that's on purpose. I know what should be there, but I never add anything but words to my work, I let people figure the meaning out themselves.  I'll start adding adding a little though, thank you so much.  I'll keep writing

on Apr. 11 2014 at 11:32 am
JacobTheOrdinary PLATINUM, Rancho Cucamonga, California
43 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Fiction is the lie that tells the truth."

Your imagery is so vivid! The depth of this piece bring a beautiful outlook on life. And the line, "Living to live for life" was a great addition to the poem and i enjoy lines that play with words like that. Some punctuation would make this poem better though. I found at least one spot where a question mark would have been nice. You never fail to disappoint and I look forward to read more from you.

on Apr. 7 2014 at 1:33 pm
iimoeloveii GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
14 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
IF YOU CAN'T HANG THEN THERE'S THE DOOR-SLEEPING WITH SIRENS

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!!!!!!!

TheUniverse said...
on Apr. 1 2014 at 6:38 pm
TheUniverse, Everywhere,, Other
0 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
Exercise to stimulate, not to annihilate. The world wasn't formed in a day, and neither were we. Set small goals and build upon them.

I love the depth of this piece..  So enlighting and in a sense romantic, I will say well done... And keep up the great work..  

on Mar. 31 2014 at 5:02 pm
Mustacheofthelorax SILVER, Ashland, Nebraska
7 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how may people are watching you, no matter what they are saying and what they are doing, it doesn't change the fact that you are you and that you are amazing.

I loved how you described things....It made me paint a picture in my mind. I think your poem is awesome!