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Deep Breaths

November 20, 2013
By dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

I used to rely
on red murky seas
to define my strength.
No matter how many,
or how deep
I could hold my
breathe forever.
But then one canyon
ran too deep with red
and I realized that
I couldn't breathe anymore.
So, to this day I plant
flowers along those
because flowers won't
let me drown.

The author's comments:
From the perspective of those who have looked on from the darker, more troubled times in their lives.

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on Jan. 2 2014 at 2:48 am
skywriter13 SILVER, Washington, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes people are beautiful. Not in looks. Not in what they say. Just in what they are.”

“Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass.”
― Anton Chekhov

“The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say.”
― Anaïs Nin

This poem speaks of perseverance and triumph. The words are brave and powerful. The opening lines whisk me away into the tangled world of my previous darkness, and it doesn’t set me free until the end. As someone stated before, the rhythm of the poem is good and your ability to capture emotions, effortlessly should not go un-noticed. Love it!

on Dec. 24 2013 at 5:23 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 167 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

You have a really good rythm with this poem!