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Can you hear me ?

November 1, 2013
By KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."


If i lied and told you I was fine,

would you stop to listen?

If i showed you the X-ray of my heart,

would you then realize it was broken?

If I called out your name in total darkness,

could you find your way back with no problem?

If I cried in front of the world,

then could you see the pain you caused?

If I begged on my knees,

would you finally let me be?

If I bled more than I should,

would you even began to pity me?

If I worked hard to prove,

would you even think twice?

If I moved across towns,

cities,

states,

countries,

to be with you,
would you then understand how much I love you?



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on Nov. 7 2013 at 4:37 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thank you :) lol  

on Nov. 7 2013 at 3:27 pm
BorderlineGenius777 SILVER, Lewiston, Idaho
7 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If all our misfortunes were laid in one common heap, whence everyone must take an equal portion, most would be content to take their own and depart."- Socrates

I like it, just because I am a sappy romantic thats used to being broken-hearted all the time because apparently life doesnt see fit to let me have lovexD but it is a bit cliche. However, its a good poem. 4/5:3

on Nov. 6 2013 at 12:25 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thank you! Appreciate the honesty!! <33

on Nov. 6 2013 at 12:22 pm
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 149 comments
I'm going to be very honest because I don't want to see people at loss just because I lied to them. XD I thought that, in the beginning it was a little cliche d but I can see, I mean, its pretty obvious that you have a lot of potential. You can definiely do better. But it doesn't mean I didn't like it, because I loved it. I can see wht you're trying to convey. Thank you. Good uck. 

on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:14 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thanks for the honesty ! <333  

on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:13 pm
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thankssssssss <3333

on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:11 pm
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
87 articles 0 photos 168 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, "Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping." - Fred Rogers

I like it, sorta. It's sorta boring and sorta repetitive, but it's an overall good poem with good meaning. I like it, but it needs work. 3/5. :)

on Nov. 5 2013 at 7:10 pm
taylortheawesomeness SILVER, Cleburne, Texas
5 articles 5 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
you can do anythin, but not everything. by david allen

thats amazing!  

on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:09 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thanks!! The ending is my fave too lol

on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:04 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

This is really sweet. the ending is by far the best. its just omazement.

Radwa said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 10:08 am
Radwa, Doha, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
it was realy nice poem

on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:55 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Typo hahah but thanksssss  

on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:52 am
FlyingKite BRONZE, Loveland, Ohio
4 articles 2 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Liar liar pantalones de fuego! -Phineas and Ferb

Begin* It's really good though!

on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:30 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

Thanks for the feedback!!

Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:14 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
19 articles 0 photos 420 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
- Zoya Khan

Maybe it would be better if it was song lyrics. But anyways, good job!