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Butterfly Rhythm

July 26, 2013
By ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
24 articles 15 photos 289 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.


Their colorful wings flap with
the wind
in tune with nature,
their subtle movements attract
me towards them;
engulfed in the serene music.
So vibrant, so small
they fly across my garden,
soaring freely through the open air.
Their careful designs sparkle
with the sun;
harmonize, and shimmer,
landing on an azalea.
Tasting the fluctuating tones with my soul,
I see raw life;
its artistry brewing with the florescent
surroundings.
So fortunate to see the world’s
puniest beauty;
to hear its most composed melody.



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Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 1 2013 at 5:09 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

thanks for the clarification. (I hate to be the one that sounds snobbish. But I've promised myself to constructively crtique.) Your imagery is superb. And you'll get the hang of it. Free verse is a lot of fun...and work. But you're a talented writer. So no worries. 

on Jul. 31 2013 at 2:48 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
24 articles 15 photos 289 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

It was supposed to be possessive, like "the artistry of it", but it was probably a typo, sorry for the confusion. And thank you for commenting on my imagery, I am really not that good at free verse poems, so the comments help.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 3:52 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Again, beautiful imagery. I love your talent to paint things with detailed  words. I was a little confused with "its" in "its artistiry". I wasn't sure if it meant "it is" or just "its". Other than that, very gorgeous poem to envision. 


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