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Stupid Girl

May 4, 2013
By wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow


Here I am, mascara done perfectly
Eye shadow matches my outfit
(When was the last time I tried that hard?)

There he is,
Nervous, fidgeting
Thinking about me.

Here I am, stumbling over every word
Calming my leaping heart
When his hand touches my back

There he is,
Thinking he’s done it
Thinking he found the right one

Here I am, tasting salty tears
As I watch him
Kiss another girl

And there he is, not caring
Not chasing after me
Because he didn’t like me in the first place

And here I am, still thinking he like me for me
Not my curly hair and my eyelashes
(Or who am I kidding? It’s probably my butt.)

There he is
Walking home alone
Happy he got a girl – so what, if it was the wrong one?

And here I am, a stupid girl
Wrecking my mascara, again, over a boy
Who isn’t even worth it.



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on May. 16 2013 at 12:08 am
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

Thank you very much!!

on May. 16 2013 at 12:08 am
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

Thank you so much! You really got all of the things that I intended with this poem (the stress of it, etc.).  It's funny, that one line was driving me nuts.  I was trying to go for the fact that she's thinking he likes her for the kind of "sweet" parts of her appearance (the kinds of things people notice when they really like you), but she admits that he was shallow and just thought she was hot (hence the butt part, haha). So, I kind of meant it in more of an... exasperated, I guess.... tone.... where she feels like she's kind of a piece of meat, if you will. But I totally agree, I don't think it came across that way.  Thanks so much for your feedback - I really appreciate it!!

on May. 15 2013 at 3:59 pm
shadowkiss96 SILVER, Selkirk, New York
5 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you're in love when you can't fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams."

This is beautifully written, and its a perfect heart break and or moving on poem that girls everywhere can relate to. keep on writing you're very talented.

on May. 14 2013 at 11:31 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! It's sad, but I still really like the title. You give a title that sort of let's the reader know what the poem will be about, but because writer's are so unique, it could be about anything. The picture goes great with this, by the way. So, I love all of your descriptions, they are so, so visual! I love the set-up, how is goes back and forth between the narrarator and the descriptions of this guy. I love the anxiety and stress in here, it's good, it feels real. My only suggestion is possibly not putting the last line in the seventh stanza. I don't know, it just seemed to make a serious poem that was so sincere, comedic. And maybe that was your plan to ease the mood, I don't know. But, it's your poem and I am just being picky. Great job!!