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Black Hole

April 13, 2013
By sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
25 articles 2 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are none so blind as those who refuse to see"


The dark I feel is unreal
Unlike anything anyone feels
The pain festering
Letting out crimson gold
Letting me see the sunshine
Warm and colored red
Driving out the cold I feel
In my heart and soul
Protecting me from the pain
Of living,breathing,feeling
Feeling things on a different level
Like my senses are super heightened
But in all the wrong areas
The dark closing in on me
Slowly but surely loosing sanity



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on Apr. 16 2013 at 9:31 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
25 articles 2 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are none so blind as those who refuse to see"

Thank you! :) I really appriciate people who like my poems because I'm really shy about my writting. Sometimes the shortness is what makes it better :) but thanks I'll keep that in mind. I like that line too :) I'm so glad you like it. Means alot. Thank you for taking the time to read it and give me feedback

on Apr. 16 2013 at 7:23 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

I love your structure and how you added imagery, but I wish you wrote more of this poem.  My favorite line is "The dark closing in on me// Slowly but surely loosing sanity."  Excellent word choice, and I like how it flows.  I LOVE THIS POEM :)

on Apr. 16 2013 at 5:32 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

profound just seems like such an inadequate word...it is...in the sense of a true poet, it is startling beyond believe, catching my breath and ripping it from my lungs, then filling them with sweeter softer flows. simply astounding...i LOVE it :)

on Apr. 16 2013 at 9:46 am
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
25 articles 2 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are none so blind as those who refuse to see"

Thank you!!! :) this poem was really hard to write because I wanted to describe how I felt and describing feelings is really hard. Thank you for taking the time to read this!! :)

on Apr. 16 2013 at 6:21 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

This is amazing i like the flow and the emotions behind it, and excellent word choice. it was just awesome