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to you

March 9, 2013
By tiredtoedlullabies SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
tiredtoedlullabies SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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if you held my heart with your tongue

I think it would be healed I think
your saliva would stay

in my golden mines and we’d never
ever have to worry about

preservation or conservation or moration
but only respiration and perspiration and

balcony full moons only whether your
tongue blocks an artery or a vein

because my blood only ever rushes or sleeps and
and usually it’s dormant until

you write my name on your wrist or whisper
princess in my ear


The author's comments:
found this looking for something like breathless gasps

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on Mar. 25 2013 at 10:45 pm
tiredtoedlullabies SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Thank you so much for the feedback!  I'm happy that the line breaks were effective.

on Mar. 16 2013 at 9:44 am
Literature_Darling GOLD, Warrenton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"To live is the rarest thing of all. Most people exsist and that is all." ~Oscar Wilde
"I am a writer quite by accident, the way one my fall and rip a hole in their jeans." ~Blogger H. B. Sachs

This was beautiful! It has an airy quality that seems to catch in my throat as I read the words.

Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 16 2013 at 2:29 am
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

I love how you broke this one up. When I read it I sounded like I was trying to catch my breath.