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Following The Cries Of The Fallen

July 13, 2012
By hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
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Your help comes out as lies
Twisted rotten roots
Absorbing whatever nutrients I may bring to this earth

If you took a step back
Fell into my mind
If you had a thought worth listening to
I'm not hearing it

They have me skewered over a fire
If they ever find out the truth
They'd go over as well;
Following the cries of the fallen
Releasing their lies like pollen

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on Jul. 16 2012 at 6:10 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

Hey man, it's been a while, huh?  xD

You have a very good way of describing the emotions being felt here.  It's different from a lot of your other poems.  I'm not so crazy about the last line though..  I think you could have had a better word choice for that one, and the rhyme doesn't quite fit right there.