Death's Knocking

December 7, 2011
I wait in this crammed hospital room
wait for my results
wait for my sentencing
wait to be taken away
my jeans stick to my thighs
glued with sweat
I feel anxious
I feel as if I'll die
the doctor comes
tells me those three dreadful words
You Have Cancer
these words whisper in my ear
rejoicing of their new found victim
Death speaks to me
Knocking telling me to let them in
I feel a chill up my spine
the color flushed from my face
I'm white as a sheet
I feel overwhelmed
should I cry or say something
I just stare at him
tears in my eyes
their ready to fall
I'm so light headed
I feel that sensation
I faint and I face my deadly friend

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Nella.Girl97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 9, 2014 at 10:46 am
Very impressive! Is this written from experience??
BloodyMary said...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 8:24 am
I love this! This took my breath away o_O Literally. :)) Awesome!
BloodyMary replied...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 8:27 am
However, there is a gaping hole(not a very big one) at the ending. Like something that still needs to be squeezed out to satisfy the whole piece. But overall, i just really loved it :))
Shadowpomgurl said...
Oct. 3, 2012 at 4:14 pm
JAMIE.... awesome. oh my god, you so good at this!!! its very vivd and compelling. LOVE!
AmieLeeHope replied...
Oct. 23, 2012 at 9:32 am
Aww thank you. XD
hotchicky101 said...
Oct. 2, 2012 at 12:28 pm
your poems are amazing :) i hope mine are as great as yours.
Hannabug said...
Oct. 2, 2012 at 11:55 am
I like how you used vivid imaging in your writing :)
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 10:20 am
Great piece~ While I read it, I felt as if I was there---watching what was happening before my eyes.
M2coolTodd said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 1:41 pm

This is SO INTRIUGING!!!!!!!!!


IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 1:38 pm
Wow, this is very vivid and chilling. You have a way with emotions!
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