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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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Range said...
on Apr. 14 2011 at 7:39 am
great!I like it.

Kunabee GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 9:35 pm
Kunabee GOLD, Aurora, Colorado
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A lot of the time a poem is all about self interpretation.  It's hard to get an obscure not-at-all-prose poem exactly the way the author intended it.

I read it once through and understood it as the son trying and testing, and wanting to be free, but the father loved him and wanted to protect him so he didn't let him go.

If I read it again, chances are I'd see it a different way.

Also, writing down stuff is helpful.  Half of me explaining my specific interpretation came their on the spot; adding some clarity to my thoughts.


on Apr. 13 2011 at 7:08 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
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Leave Merlin to their opinion and we'll leave you to your own.

on Apr. 13 2011 at 5:53 pm
I really liked it, but to tell the truth, I'm a blonde so, naturally, it took me a minute to understand the end. But it is a terriffically written poem, and it is going in my bookmarks! I'm just so sorry that iI was in such a blonde mood when i read this!!!! ;P

on Apr. 13 2011 at 4:50 pm
Yasamen_Denise BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
It's so hard to look up when you've been looking down for so long.

This is a really good poem! I've shared it with some of my friends and it brought tears to their eyes

on Apr. 13 2011 at 8:30 am
Evilgummysattack GOLD, Williamsburg, Michigan
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Really amazing. I actually started to cry, I read it over and over.

spency SILVER said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 8:18 am
spency SILVER, Irvington, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"DON'T GIVE UP,REACH YOURSELF UP"

nice poem.i really like it,good job,and itz very short too

floragj GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 5:17 am
floragj GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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This is lovely. The rhyme scheme reminds me of a rhythmic undertow.

on Apr. 12 2011 at 8:27 am
superpiggy13 SILVER, Madison, New Jersey
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I Love your poem keep writing

on Apr. 11 2011 at 9:26 am
softballfreak GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"nobody is worth your tears and the one who is wont make you cry."

This is an awesome poem!!!!! I think you should just make it a little bot more clear!!! But other than that it is FABULOUS!!!!

on Apr. 10 2011 at 10:38 am
KaitlynMarie GOLD, Northborough, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I finally understood what true love meant...love meant that you care for another person&#039;s happiness more than your own, no matter how painful the choices you face might be.&quot; <br /> -Nicholas Sparks

You can't understand a poem by reading it once or twice. Open your mind and read it again, I thought it was really good.

Keeper6 GOLD said...
on Apr. 9 2011 at 2:22 pm
Keeper6 GOLD, Buffalo, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Giving up doesn&#039;t always mean you are weak, sometimes it just means you are strong enough to let go.

I don't want to be mean or anything but i dont get it could some one please explain?

on Apr. 9 2011 at 9:35 am
RideTheWave BRONZE, South Riding, Virginia
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THIS WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!

on Apr. 8 2011 at 8:19 pm
inspiredbytheworld BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
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What kind of poetry is this? The good kind.

Angie123 GOLD said...
on Apr. 8 2011 at 8:17 pm
Angie123 GOLD, Madison, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Keep on going and don&#039;t give up&quot;

This is creative. I really like it :)

on Apr. 8 2011 at 7:54 am
HeArToNmYsLeEvE BRONZE, St. Helena Island, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
People have opened doors for me so who am I to slam it in your face<br /> -Me

despite what others may say this is a really good poem not confusing at all nice and to the point keep it up!

on Apr. 7 2011 at 12:53 pm
byebyebeautiful, North Olmsted, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
so how long did i expect love to outweigh ignorance, by that look on your face i may have forced the scale to tip..... -AVENGED SEVENFOLD, ALMOST EASY

it was amazing! you are a gifted person, keep up the good work! <3

on Apr. 7 2011 at 12:40 pm
How is this a hot poem? What kind of poetry is this?

on Apr. 5 2011 at 8:13 pm
This is a really great poem. Nice job and well done(: 

on Apr. 5 2011 at 11:23 am
Hi my name is blanka fatu and this guy is really stupid and fat (colton) but stop copyin my work artard.