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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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KayleeRae PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 5:29 pm
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I love this, it has very nice rhythm :D
hollygolightly109 SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2011 at 5:30 pm
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The imagery, strong. The meaning people find in water, sand, stone, and flying is something that you're using so simply! It connects on such a basic level. 

Your piece inspired me to put more of these universal images and meanings in my work... make people connect!

Thanks.

jenna-e said...
on Jul. 25 2011 at 12:15 am
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Very nice.
poet.lover said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 7:12 pm
wow that's amazing! i can relate to an extent and the emotion is so strong
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anyone who appreciated this should also read my poem Briar Rose
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I am sorry about your relationship with your father. I strongly urge you to stand up to him. 
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Wonderful images! Great emotions and you put words together so smoothly it's a great gift. :) Keep writing. And if possible can you check out some of my pieces? 
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Cool poem.  Please check out mine if you get the chance.  From the Hilltop and Anonymous' Inferno. 
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I feel your pain.
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Its just criticisim, they're just voicing they're opinion. Could have done it more polietly however
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I like how this poem reaches out to you when you read it :)

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It's a stylistic thing that he didn't capitalize "i". Check out E.E. Cummings' work.
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Very descriptive way to put your feelings in such a beautiful scenic way(:
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its not your poem, so it doesnt really matter what you think about the grammar and oxymoron usage. its not tailored to make sense to you.
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on Jul. 6 2011 at 10:53 am

I meant to post under my screen name ElleNicole how great I think this is, but for some reason my comments don't show up... but just so you know, this is great. =)

Check out my poem? Just do an advanced search and type in ElleNicole and Change as the title and you should find it... thanks if you do. Sorry for advertising on your lovely poem!

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This poem is basically a description of my life! I connected to this poem so much...Perfectly written except that you didn't capitalize "i".
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I really like this, espically because I know the feeling of wanting to be free, and being held back. The more you're pulled back, the more you want to push away. For those who don't quite understand it, well, you have to look at it from a different perspective. I've read thing lots of time that I don't understand at all, but out of nowhere a while later it just clicks. Great work =]