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Last of the Dragons

September 22, 2011
By BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments

The last of the dragons
Crawl down
Into sewer lairs
To guard hoards
Of painted plastic
And copper coated zinc

Their flames gone
Used up
By smog induced coughs

The only fair maidens captured
Anorexic barbies
Whose gleaming smiles
Scare off
Even the fiercest wyvern

Who can say
How long they will continue
To subsist
These last of the dragons

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This article has 11 comments.

Dynamo DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 15 2012 at 4:09 am
Dynamo DIAMOND, Lahore, Other
54 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
I used to think falling in love would be personal. But it's all a big public show.

Awesome really. The use of dragons as a metaphor was interesting. I never thought anyone would do that. This poem has everything that a good poem must have; it resists cliche, is unique and creative. The only one I'll rate besides giving a review:)

Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 12:04 pm
This was interesting. It caught me a little of guard, just the way it turned... but it was pretty neat.

BluBliss GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2011 at 6:21 am
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
14 articles 0 photos 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
Bella's love for Edward was like, "Omg. He's hot. He's mine because he sparkles. Now I'll brood the wholle book while I'm with him."

Interesting. I like the use of dragons as a metaphor. Good job! I always like puttihng anorexics in bad spotlight... its fun.

on Oct. 14 2011 at 11:30 pm
LittleMidnight PLATINUM, Glendale, Arizona
28 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is but a book just waiting to be filled, you make your own story

Interesting read, good job. That and I'm a big dragon lover. love it!!! >.<

on Oct. 14 2011 at 9:21 pm
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 44 comments
I really like the continuity created by the repetition of the first & last lines, as well as how you brought a mystique into the problems of the world. Very thought provoking! On the other hand, though, a couple of terms ("anorexic barbies") were a little cliche.

on Oct. 13 2011 at 8:58 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
22 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."

Very thought provoking, I definitely enjoyed the line about 'fair maidens' and 'annorexic barbies'. You're writing is intriguing, keep it up!

on Oct. 12 2011 at 10:32 pm
love2love17 GOLD, Springfield, Missouri
13 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough. -Mae West

Wow, I really like your take on this, especially the term anorexic barbies. Very thought-provoking!

on Oct. 12 2011 at 10:16 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

I like how you see the world. It once was healthy and in good shape but now, thanks to man kind, its polluted and alot of its majestic animals have been killed. I like the word choice too.

on Oct. 12 2011 at 2:56 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Ok, so I'm kind of super impressed with the poeticism here. And the fact that you used the word wyvern. The meaning is layers thick, and the metaphor is potent. Good stuff. 

on Oct. 12 2011 at 2:17 am
JulieRae13 SILVER, /, Other
8 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All I ever learned from love was how to shoot somebody who outdrew you"

I love the language used in this poem. It is very powerful, the way the pollution and corruption of the world has even suppressed a symbol of valiance and greatness.

on Oct. 11 2011 at 8:43 pm GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."

This is good! And it really rings true in this day and age because of all the pollution and artificial- ness ( I, for one, am a believe of global warming)