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Incomplete

August 22, 2011
By savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.


I think of you
When I’m alone
When I’m surrounded
When I’m happy
When I’m sad
When I’m without you.

I hold on to that
Last hug
Last smile
Last laugh
Last sight
Last moment with you.

I count down the
Seconds
Minutes
Hours
Days
Weeks until we’re together.

Because without you
I’m incomplete.


The author's comments:
This is not about a crush, a date, or a marriage. This is about love between the very best of friends. This is about love that you never forget.

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on Feb. 21 2012 at 7:34 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Thanks RedFeather! I like the idea of it being a soft yellow color :).

on Feb. 21 2012 at 12:59 pm
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

 

(Smiling slightly) I don't know how to start. This poem is beautiful in its way. You have a distinct writing stlye in your poems, I've noticed. It's very relatable, yet at the same time, I find this poem rather sad, but that's probably just me and my own pesky memories. Anyone else, I'm sure would think of your poem in a brighter light - probably a soft yellow or pink-tinted light that's not bright, but not so faint that it doesn't light up the area around it.


on Sep. 6 2011 at 6:15 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I think is my favorite comment from you Raven, it's so heartfelt.  It is a shame, sweet it such a pretty word.  It's the same for the word love, it's so overused that it almost ceases to mean anything.

on Sep. 5 2011 at 5:28 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

It's such a pity that the word "sweet" has begun to mean 'naive' and 'childlike.' Anyway, this poem made me very happy, and I liked its devotion and its... love, because it's describing one of the things most worth living for. Beautiful, Liz. The Raven now wears a tear on his eye. :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 4:59 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Awww, this is beautiful :) It's so innocent, perfectly simple in a way appropriate to the subject.