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You Never Held Me Up..

November 14, 2010
By Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson


Can’t you see that you’re the one for me?
Didn’t you know I wasn’t ready to let go?
I loved what we had.
So why does it have to end on a note so bad?
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me.
You said you would try and help
And all I could do
Was play the cards that were dealt.
I tried my hardest not to loose this game.
I lost, but am not the one to blame.
For it is you that should feel ashamed
You mislead me with your gorgeous smile.
That made the time we shared all worth wile.
Out of all of the people in the world,
You’re the one I can’t stand,
So why do I still long for your hand?
I am finally done with all our fights
So why is it hard for me to sleep at night?
Why can’t you realize how much I need you?
I just want to hear “I love you too.”
I want to know this isn’t the last straw,
I want to know you didn’t go far.
I’m not ready to start over,
Not ready to cry upon another shoulder.
It is you I want.
And you only,
Without you I feel terribly lonely.
Not sure if I am strong enough to continue alone.
Didn’t you see, that when times got rough,
It was you I needed to hold me up?
But this time, you’re the one that made me fall
Through your fingers I slipped,
And lost it all.



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on Nov. 19 2010 at 12:04 pm
SuicidalDreamer.. PLATINUM, Marshall, Illinois
31 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Drop The World....." Or "Everything Happens For A Reason....." Or "I am jealous of every woman that has ever hugged him, Cause for that mere second. They held my entire world."

This was truely amazing...I love the flow of it and how the words just seem to fall into place with one another....^^....You should totally check out some of my work, I think you will like em....But the one I think you would like the most is unforgiven....Keep up the good work :D

<3 xXBrokenXNightmareXx

 


on Nov. 18 2010 at 6:44 pm
nickykens ELITE, Draper, Utah
134 articles 2 photos 86 comments
I agree completely.  Good poem but it doesn't stand out from any others.  With a little more work and practice, you could be amazing. (not that I'm an expert)

deeds14 said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 1:09 pm

 

This is an amazing poem , It kind of reminds me of a song for some reason . lol, well anyways goood job and i hope to read more by you (: 


on Nov. 18 2010 at 10:51 am
Emin3mAC SILVER, Nogalas, Arizona
7 articles 0 photos 17 comments
Very good(: Keep up the good work. ((: ^^

on Nov. 18 2010 at 9:45 am
love thiss! soo cutee! </3

LilBenj SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 12:21 am
LilBenj SILVER, Richfield, Utah
6 articles 4 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a certain providence in the fall of a sparrow. - Hamlet

You're a good writer - I guess I just find the subject matter a little cliche. There are too many over-used phrases. It just doesn't reach me.

on Nov. 17 2010 at 10:33 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

WOW!!!!! :) this peom is well beautiful you are seriously talented, never stop writing! Check out my work? I'd love to hear your opinion :)

on Nov. 17 2010 at 5:32 pm
fearlesslybeyourselff SILVER, Solon, Ohio
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is only one you for all of time. Fearlessly be yourself.

AMAZING! MY FAVORITE BY FAR! THE FLOW IS AMAZING AS WELL, AND THIS DEPICTS MY LIFE SO WELL

on Nov. 17 2010 at 12:44 pm
Savannainthesky GOLD, West Suffield, Connecticut
11 articles 0 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It may have been in pieces.. but I gave you the best of me"-Jim Morrison(the doors)

aww that was soo moving and i completly feel the same way.. great job

on Nov. 17 2010 at 12:41 pm
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson

I like a lot of your stuff, i intend to comment on your work, just at a later date. But, good job! keep writing bbg (:

on Nov. 17 2010 at 10:47 am
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson

Thanks bluegirl440

on Nov. 17 2010 at 10:47 am
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson

You have to do what's best for you. Breakups hurt, but in the long run you need to focus on how you will benifit. Keep your head up sweetie.

on Nov. 17 2010 at 10:46 am
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson

:( Thats extremly unfortunate, i'm sorry for that. but, i am glad my writing could reach you. (:

on Nov. 17 2010 at 9:55 am
bluegirl440 DIAMOND, Park City, Utah
84 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everybody lies. -House

Wow this is absolutly fantastic....I know someone like this

on Nov. 17 2010 at 9:32 am
MelanieElizabeth_18 GOLD, Gatlinburg, Tennessee
14 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No sacrifice, No victory."

i seriuosly love this! its amazing!

dymond jones said...
on Nov. 17 2010 at 9:15 am
really good!!!!!!!!!

on Nov. 17 2010 at 9:05 am
.babycakes. GOLD, Waupaca, Wisconsin
10 articles 7 photos 8 comments
i really like this poem and i feel i can relate.atleast from the standpoint of heartbreak.i was with a guy for a year and 4 days after that one year i found a girl in his bed :(

MRose911 GOLD said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 10:06 pm
MRose911 GOLD, Paradise, Utah
17 articles 10 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No boy is worth crying over and the one who is won't make you cry." - Sarah Kane

AMAZING!!! You have a gift! :) Please check out some of my work if you get the chance. I would love to hear your opinion!

Swim Nut said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 9:45 pm
I can relate to this.  I'm thinking of breaking up with my boyfriend, and wondering if he will feel like this.  He likes me, a lot, and were just not right for eachother.  I don't want to hurt him though.

on Nov. 16 2010 at 9:40 pm
Simply,Savannah GOLD, Picayune, Mississippi
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go where the path may lead.. Go instead where there is no path, and leave a trail" -Emerson

much appreciated