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Here Comes the Rain

February 4, 2010
By cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
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Here comes the rain.
The day was indescribable
My mind is a blur.
But I do know the rain is coming

My body wants to break free
And never look back
When will the rain come?

My muscles are tense
What can bring my mind back to reality?
Here comes the rain.

My head points upward as the breeze moves around my skin,
Here comes the rain.

The smell of wet enters the air
The raindrop calmly drops on the bridge of my nose,
My Friend is here,
Welcome back rain.


The author's comments:
Here comes the rain.
The day was indescribable
My mind is a blur.
But I do know the rain is coming

My body wants to break free
And never look back
When will the rain come?

My muscles are tense
What can bring my mind back to reality?
Here comes the rain.

My head points upward as the breeze moves around my skin,
Here comes the rain.

The smell of wet enters the air
The raindrop calmly drops on the bridge of my nose,
My Friend is here,
Welcome back rain.

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on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:37 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

I know exactly what you mean. I always appreciate the constructive criticism more than the praise. It means someone put thought into it. Glad you appreciate it too. And sure, I'd be glad to look at more of your work.

on Aug. 1 2010 at 7:45 pm
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
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Thank you for being honest!! I always get complimenting comments, and i always just wish someone would give me real feedback..i mean, we are all on here...might as well help each other out right? Anyways, i would love if you would look at more of my work. Thank you!

on Jun. 27 2010 at 10:34 am
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
30 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

I think I would have like this better if it had a flow. It wasn't very lyrical. (not that all poems have to be) But it wasn't easy to read.  

on Feb. 26 2010 at 6:36 pm
cheyenneduhon PLATINUM, Lumberton, Texas
31 articles 0 photos 144 comments
Didnt mean to put the whole poem as my comments..oh well..