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Don't give up. (To children being abused)

February 15, 2010
By LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Sitting
Home.
*KNOCK*

You arrived.

I
Hide. Away
Anyways
There is no place to be safe.

Screams
Nothing new by now.
Steps
I know what follows. Somehow.

Fought
One more afternoon. One
more tear. Dropped.
Don't surrender I say, but I know we won't last much more.

Scratch.
But this time it's not alone;
This time something comes. (Drunk)

Within you

holding something.
You call, Lou.
I won't answer.

Steps.
I know this time we won't survive.
We won't make it.
But at least I thank God for live.

Good you, take no compasion.
Good

me. Play hide and seek.

Shower! That's.
I pretend to bath. You
sleep. I survive.

Go to school.
On my bike.
Everything's cool.
Now's alright.

But today is different.
I got tired.
Instead of home went to police.
It's not only anymore desired.

New family.

*KNOCK*

But this time I'm safe
I don't need to pay



Anymore
For how you behave.



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LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:15 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
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Please check FakE You and comment!!

It happened to me... I am still kinda recovering from it! :(

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:14 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Please check FakE You and comment!! Please :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:14 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Can you please check Fake You and comment???

Thankkss!! :D

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:13 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Please check Fake You and comment!! :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:13 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Please check Fake You and commentt! :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:12 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
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Please check Fake You and commentt!! :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:11 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
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Please check Fake You and comment!! :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:11 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Please check FakE You and comment!!

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:07 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
:O THANK YOU!!!! :D You are so lovely to write the comment OMG and that was just my first free verse!! :D

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:06 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Oh my god!!!! :O It's a pleasure to talk to you!! Your works are GREAT!!! AWSOME!! I love them!! :D I took some advices from them.. =P I really feel good that you think so possitive of mines!! :D THANK YOUU!

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:04 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
I'll check them out! Of course!! :D Thank you for answering and thank you SO MUCH for appreciating my work!! :D

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:04 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
NEVER give up my dear!!! :D I wrote this for people like you, so you know there is always the bright side! And superiors (police) are here to help you! :) You have all of me on your side! Take this as advice! :) If you don't do anything, it could get worse and worse until something important can REALLY happen! Thank you for your comment! And I am greattha you -that are experienced- think just as positive of my work!! :D

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:01 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Oh! Thank you!! :D And thank you for the help, like this I can really reflect and, you know, do next ones better!! Greatt!! Thank you so muchh!! :)

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 2:00 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Of Course! I'll check them out! :) Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! :) You can't imagine how happy I am and how lovely it is to read possitive comments like yours, specially!!! :D

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 1:59 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Oh!! You're so nice! Thank You!!!! :D I wrote this because I thought that some children need this help. They should NEVER give up.!

LuzA. GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 1:58 pm
LuzA. GOLD, Santo Domingo, Other
13 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Thank You so much!! :)

tibby BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 1:48 pm
tibby BRONZE, Henderson, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
i feel you on my fingertips, my toung dances behind my lips-flyleaf

that is amaizing. i can relate to what your saying...

xLpoet SILVER said...
on Feb. 20 2010 at 1:41 pm
xLpoet SILVER, Bristow, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not the length of life but the depth of life"- Ralph Waldo Emerson

I like the unique structure. The courage to write something bold is needed in the world. Keep writing. I write about things like this in an abstract way. I like it how you did it outright.

on Feb. 20 2010 at 12:57 pm
BrookeSchueneman PLATINUM, Elko, Minnesota
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The ending was great, and it, overall, was great aswell. Bravo :) read some of my work if you get the chance, please :) rate, if you can!

on Feb. 19 2010 at 7:15 pm
MessOfADreamer PLATINUM, North Tonawanda, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I write for the same reason I breathe -- because if I didn't, I would die." -Isaac Asimov

I love the way this is written, it is very powerful and strong. It's disjointed, but it flows anyway, and it made me think. Good job. :D