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Cannot See

October 8, 2009
By AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx


Heartbreaking pain
may try to reign
my life,
my mind,
my soul.
"My kingdom numb
my will is done
now let me rest in peace"
rest wont come
and all my pain
to you are hidden.
You do not see me.
What color are my tearstains?
My pain
is all invisible.
Nothing to see.


The author's comments:
another poem that is part of my destruction is beautiful collection

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on Mar. 23 2010 at 2:55 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

woww.

this is reallly good. so deep

plz keep writing!!

on Mar. 10 2010 at 6:40 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow, this si really good. It reminded me of my own past too, where for three years I was perpetually numb and my pain hidden. Excellent job, never stop writing

Saidah. GOLD said...
on Mar. 3 2010 at 2:47 pm
Saidah. GOLD, Williamsport, Pennsylvania
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I really liked your poem..!!

It really made me think of my past. All the pain and hurt I felt.

Thanxx for the poem that reminded me of me.

Hopee to enjoy some more of your writing pieaces.

*****Saidah M.

on Feb. 21 2010 at 1:17 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
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I really love how in this poem you can literally turn pain into beauty! A lot of people on teenink ask me to read their work and, quite frankly, I'm not always impressed, but I think you really have something going here your work is something to be wondered upon. It is the deepest emotion with the most beautiful outlining deatil of beauty I am in absolute awe!

on Feb. 19 2010 at 6:47 am
Acalleq PLATINUM, Togiak, Alaska
22 articles 5 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
you never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

this really touched me. seems like ppl look at u but never really see you. i know you probably hear this a lot but you got talent. not afriad to share whats inside with the rest of us. i like that. keep it up.

on Feb. 4 2010 at 2:14 pm
Underestimated GOLD, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Every girl wants a guy she can go to hair a mess, in sweats, eyes red from crying, and the first thing he says to her is "baby your beautiful" and actually means it.

i like this one alot, its awesome, once again i can relate.

im the type of person who hides their feelings, so they r invisible. yer a great poet(:

AMJaeh DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 3 2010 at 8:14 pm
AMJaeh DIAMOND, Gallatin, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
you don't have to understand the language to know its Poetik written Muzyk~PoetikMuzyk
Not Everything is ours to keep, no matter how hard we had to fight for it~PoetikMuzyk
‎"The face of my enemy only frightens me when I see how much it resembles mine"
- Stanislaw J. Lec

a few neurons can make us all a morons dont you think?

i really enjoyed this piece

on Feb. 3 2010 at 6:51 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
PERSONAL FAVORITE QUOTE::::

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

your poems could lift a building!

really enjoyed this

keep writing

on Feb. 3 2010 at 6:50 pm
wow this poem is great, it has a very strong vibe to it. i like your writing style not only was i reading it the words come right off the page as if they were alive.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 5:42 pm
Candypop BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
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This is a really good and strong poem! :D

on Jan. 29 2010 at 5:01 pm
ChaoticDamned GOLD, Provo, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Whoever said anything was possible, obviously never tried slamming a revolving door."

wow...this is really good...I like it *two thumbs up*

on Jan. 26 2010 at 1:13 pm
ilovemath=) BRONZE, Frederic, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Where there is love, there is life."

~very good~ I loved it!

dc123 SILVER said...
on Jan. 22 2010 at 11:26 am
dc123 SILVER, Antrim, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
U wont some come get some

i know where your come from on this one because i was always let down by ever one ans where i grow up i was not aloud to show my failings

on Jan. 21 2010 at 7:00 pm
AlmostCassidy GOLD, Ely, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love something let it go if it comes back you, It's yours forever."

This Is great really Just Great I hope to see it in one of there mags i think it really should be in there ((:

on Jan. 21 2010 at 4:20 pm
hBaAnNnAaNhA BRONZE, West Newbury, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live the life you choose, not the life you're told.

i like all of your poems, but this is probably my favorite:)

on Jan. 19 2010 at 9:08 pm
Madeline.Pearl PLATINUM, Smithville, Texas
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I Really Do Enjoy your work, Its Deep But not far Enough Under that it wont touch even the simplest of hearts

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:25 pm
Avenging_Angel PLATINUM, Cleburne, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"You never really know your friends from your enemies until the ice breaks. "- Eskimo

i like your poems. i really like them. :D

Carol BRONZE said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:30 pm
Carol BRONZE, Weslaco, Texas
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This is great, I loved it. >.< tre bien

on Jan. 14 2010 at 6:43 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Your work is always powerful and beautiful.

on Jan. 11 2010 at 4:15 pm
mockingbirdsong GOLD, Russellville, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
No judging, just loving.

You sound very hurt and alone, but your not alone, trust me. I wrote this song once called :"There's somebody out there" It talks about how,no matter what you've done, God is a forgiving and loving God and has room for everyone in his arms, You just have to run to him. He will listen to your feelings and He knows the colors of your teardrops, He loves you and when no one else shows up, God is there for you, just run. This poem is touching.All my poems aren't posted yet, but when they are I would love you to check them out.