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Rain

March 1, 2021
By MAC-HAB GOLD, Wyndmere, North Dakota
MAC-HAB GOLD, Wyndmere, North Dakota
12 articles 2 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are braver than you believe, stronger than you seem, and smarter than you think." -Christopher Robin


Rain,

Billows ouside

three years

in a purgatory state.

Now the words I've written

hit me hard

like the storm I left brewing.

Many times I tried

to see the storm.

So I could face it like them.

 

But now I can

I don't blank out

when I write my poems.

I now feel each word

as it cuts deep to my soul.

Why did I wait three years?

And now durring nights

when the pills wear off

I cry like the rain.

And with the rain.

 

As if I am the rain

that must leave the cloud

maybe the tears

must be shed

for a rainbow

of clarity

to appear.

Three years left numb.

Now the words sting us both

and not just you.

 

Now I rain on my paper

I hope the storm ends.

Because I've waited three years.

And now all my words sting.


The author's comments:

After losing my brother, I started writing poetry. Whenever I wrote, I would blank out. I wrote this in honor of my brother, James.


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on Feb. 15 2022 at 12:48 pm
poetstears GOLD, Columbus, Other
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This is incredible. Keep writing!

on Jan. 17 2022 at 5:11 am
aalaazah1 PLATINUM, Colombo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
where words fail music speaks
success is a journey, not a destination

when you feel your best, everybody else can feel it too - ARIANA GRANDE

If you are able to look yourself
in the mirror every day
with the decisions that you make,
that's where power starts - SELENA GOMEZ

Before you judge people judge yourself - ZAYN MALIK

haters will say what they want, but their hate will
never stop you from chasing your dream- JUSTIN BIEBER

If you follow your dreams,
it means you follow your heart.
if you do follow your heart,
I don't think you can go wrong- CELINE DION

this is literally fantastic

on Aug. 8 2021 at 2:00 pm
Cucoolchameleon GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
19 articles 2 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is no greater agony than an untold story within you" - Maya Angelou

I can feel your raw emotion through the words. And I'm glad you found poetry. It truly is healing.

on Mar. 30 2021 at 11:55 am
ivaramos224 GOLD, San Antonio, Texas
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Wow, this is amazing! This was so well written

on Mar. 18 2021 at 5:44 pm
SarahLulu555 BRONZE, Hailey, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
“It is not your business to determine how good it is, nor how valuable it is, nor how it compares with other expressions. It is your business to keep it yours clearly and directly, to keep the channel open.”
- Martha Graham -

The trope of rain ties the entire poem nicely together, the weight of the storm perfect imagery. I loved, "I now feel each word/as it cuts deep to my soul./Why did I wait three years?" and "Three years left numb./Now the words sting us both/and not just you" and especially the end. As @WillC2021 said, truly compelling.

on Mar. 18 2021 at 9:58 am
Haydenolmsted, Wyndmere Nd, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
If you only work when you feel like it, nothing gets done

just amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 17 2021 at 4:35 pm
WillC2021 ELITE, Winfield, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Never give up! Put in the hard work and efforts to achieve your ambitions and goals!

Nicely written and deeply compelling!

on Mar. 17 2021 at 3:58 pm
jezaraesmykowski, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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GOOD JOB MCKINNLEE!!

kennavosberg said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 3:54 pm
kennavosberg, Mantador, North Dakota
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"you can do it" -kenna vosberg

GOOD JOB BRO!

avakrier said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 2:46 pm
avakrier, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
No matter what people think of you, aways keeping singing your own song

Good Job Cousin!!!!!!! :)

SaulM1269 said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 2:46 pm
SaulM1269, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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"Lets get this bread"

Goated!

mariajerdee said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 2:41 pm
mariajerdee, Milnor, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"Intellectual growth should commence at birth and ease only at death" - Albert Einstein

Good job!!

bquamsavage said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 2:40 pm
bquamsavage, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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"You will face many defeats in life, but never let yourself be defeated." -Maya Angelou

absolutely amazing cuz

addys-n SILVER said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 11:54 am
addys-n SILVER, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Some women fear the fire, some women become it.. - R.H. Sin

Very heartfelt! Love This!!

LeahSloth14 said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 11:54 am
LeahSloth14, Wyndmere Nd, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"The darkest nights produce the brightest stars."
-John Green

This is so good and heartfelt.

Mason_S21 said...
on Mar. 17 2021 at 11:53 am
Mason_S21, Mcleod, North Dakota
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Amazing, great job!

on Mar. 17 2021 at 11:53 am
Rileygetsthem55 BRONZE, Wyndmere, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"And into the field I go to lose my mind and find my soul"

Good Job