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My future father

October 8, 2018
By Jav13r-a-p3r3z BRONZE, Santa Ana, California
Jav13r-a-p3r3z BRONZE, Santa Ana, California
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I appreciate the times you sacrifice
But it's time for you to rest
And stop rolling the dice
Decide what to sacrifice
There is no longer a reason to manifest

You tried to be the best for us

Your hands are now fragile as glass
They now require my assist
It is now time to give me the responsibility and pass
You no longer have a reason to persist

Those rough dry hands with cuts
Have now healed and must relax
You’ve demonstrated your guts
You’ve have had your drawbacks

Your bruises have healed
You’ve crossed borders and failed
But I never saw you kneeled
You crossed despite being jailed

A goodbye to your mother was painful
Your family said goodbye as they were left behind
But now it's time to show how grateful
Your children were now in your mind

The lifting of constant weight cost your back
Work countless hours with not much rest
The times you’ve kept me on the right track
The countless times I saw you it would hurt my chest

You became the best for us

We were a reason for you to suffer
As we would have all we needed
But in the end, it made you tougher
And for us you still lifted

Of course, it would sometimes be chaotic
Complications caused us to eat each other's throat
We would both be sick
But aside from that, we were on the same boat

It is now time to give you my coat
Worrying about me must no longer be
It was always your coat that kept me warm and I must devote
It's now time to repay what you once did for me

I'm no longer that boy but rather a man
I’m the man you wanted me to become
But I still behave as the same boy when I began
I’m no longer feeling at the bottom

This is your life I re-tell,
The pain was not imaginary.
I would never want to say farewell,
But eventually, we will be at the cemetery.

You were the best for us

I guess this is everything you wanted me to become
The only life you get to live as you choose to raise us
All those problems are gone as you overcome
And having us smiling was a bonus.

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This article has 10 comments.

on Mar. 3 at 8:25 am
Autumn_Lauray SILVER, Lynchburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Women, they have minds, and they have souls, as well as just hearts. And they’ve got ambition, and they’ve got talent, as well as just beauty. I’m so sick of people saying that love is all a woman is fit for.”

― Louisa May Alcott, Little Women

Truly amazing. You should be very proud of this poem!

on Feb. 11 at 4:24 pm
dunsmores1 GOLD, Ledyard, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
There's a million things I haven't done, but just you wait."

~Hamilton (Via Lin-Manuel Miranda)

I think that this is a great poem, some advice though for future poems is to try not repeating words so much, giving it a smoother feel. Good job!

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on Dec. 14 2021 at 1:37 pm
rkhoshnevis, Charlotte, North Carolina
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This poem gives a feeling of support from a father and it shows you how they should act.

on Sep. 13 2021 at 12:38 pm
ThatGirlSkyyy, Chandler, Arizona
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The poem really shows me what a father should act like. I love the way you wrote this.

pmurgu2 said...
on Nov. 16 2020 at 6:58 am
pmurgu2, London, Other
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This is just a test please ignore

yusufmahmoud said...
on Dec. 19 2019 at 2:30 pm
yusufmahmoud, Sacramento, California
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this poem really speaks to me because it talk how a father should be and how he wants to be a better father when he has kids. I can relate because i don"t have a dad at all and I want to be better father than my dad.

on May. 13 2019 at 10:12 am
Nightmare_Beauty GOLD, Elizabethtown, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Every experience is individual. Nobody can experience the same exact thing as you in that same exact way.

A couple of typos but in all beautiful!!

on Dec. 27 2018 at 2:54 pm
fictionovereality BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If it costs you your peace, it's too expensive."

This is absolutely beautiful!

on Dec. 1 2018 at 9:25 pm
MaKayla_Schultz51702 SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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I really like this piece and how you took such a personal topic an created it into something amazing. I love how you explained his life and then wrote how it reflects on your life today. A message I took away from this piece is that you should cherish those you love the most and be thankful for every bit of work they put in just to make sure you're living a good life.

on Nov. 8 2018 at 9:09 am
TB_WRITER SILVER, Hartford, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Dearly Beloved, We are gathered here today to get through this thing called life."

- Prince Rogers Nelson (1958-2016)

Wonderful piece of work!