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Fire Sprite

April 14, 2013
By ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 168 comments

She runs swiftly throughout a forest,
And skips under and over logs.
She climbs up trees and swings on branches,
And startles feeding wild hogs.

She breaks into houses in the night,
And robs people of all they have.
She leaves behind nothing at all,
And flees when people come to save.

She roars with fury as a lion,
And stalks you in the black midnight.
She pounces fearlessly onto you,
And leaves her mark with claw and bite.

She tosses and shakes her fiery hair,
And twirls and leaps with the glow of the sun.
She dances with such energy,
And floats and soars with the air as one.

She purrs gently at you like a cat,
And licks at the fingers that come too near.
She stares at you with her yellow eyes,
And water is her greatest fear.

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This article has 13 comments.

on Nov. 1 2013 at 11:47 am
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 168 comments
Thank you so much for ur positive feedback! You don't know how much this affects me!

on Oct. 31 2013 at 10:32 pm
Pargaran SILVER, New Glasgow, Other
6 articles 3 photos 123 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are, and say what you feel. Because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."
-Dr. Seuss

I loved this...oh my gosh. Keep on writing! :D

on Oct. 25 2013 at 6:03 pm
LaChouette GOLD, Mount Vernon, New York
12 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
“And then there are the times when the wolves are silent and the moon is howling.”
- George Carlin

Very nice! I think it paints a very clear picture of fire and how dangerous it can be. Awesome. Congratulations on the Editor's Choice!

on May. 5 2013 at 6:12 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
I loved the personification use, it made the poem really powerful and simply amazing. You are really talented, write on. :)

on Apr. 25 2013 at 9:49 am
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 168 comments
Thanks everyone for the incouraging comments! It means a lot! =)

jess14 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 24 2013 at 7:10 pm
jess14 BRONZE, New York, New York
4 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We accept the love we think we deserve"

wow this is so amazing and powerful. u r a really skilled writer. this painted such a clear image in my head! this is one of the best!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 24 2013 at 4:38 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Very well done on personifying fire. Your metaphors and similes and symbolism demonstrate the talent of a poet in the making, if not one already.

on Apr. 24 2013 at 8:56 am
LexiDawn SILVER, Sanford, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My thoughts are stars I cannot fathom into constellations."

"It was books that me made feel that, perhaps, I was not completely alone."

Nice peom! Loved it!!!<3

on Apr. 21 2013 at 8:07 pm
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

wow ur an amazing writer! i loved this poem sooo much!!!!

on Apr. 21 2013 at 7:23 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

Very good job. There's a few meter pricks, but overall well done. My fav stanza is the one about firey hair, where the personification really shines. Keep on writing!

on Apr. 21 2013 at 10:54 am
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 168 comments
Thanks for the comments you guys! It incourages me a lot! =D

on Apr. 20 2013 at 9:57 pm
TevyRae PLATINUM, Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
24 articles 7 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Here is a small fact: You are going to die." ~The Book Thief
"You have no stupidity inside of your adorable little self." ~Mikey Pasterik

VERY GOOD!! great job! keep writing, i like your work!!  five starsss!!

on Apr. 19 2013 at 3:39 pm
MeggieMills SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
9 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
I therefor I am a Writer.

So cool! It's very creative and nice!

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