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inside suicide

September 27, 2009
By 20hiscaiti09 GOLD, Sperryville, Virginia
20hiscaiti09 GOLD, Sperryville, Virginia
11 articles 3 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love you more"


Screaming inside not wanting to do it out loud.
Knowing he'd leave her if she made a sound.
Loving him was a slow form of suicide.
His life were the rules by which she had to abide.
So she went upstairs and grabbed a gun.
Knowing inside her what had to be done.
She looked at his bitter sweet smile one last time.
He never thought she'd end her own life.
He said it was like something strong possesed her.
He kept asking himself what had occured.
So she sent him a message from the grey sky above,
saying she was possesed, possesed by his love.



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on Oct. 13 2012 at 11:22 pm
KeyonnaB SILVER, Fayette, Mississippi
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i never thought of love as a slow suicide, breathe taking :)

on Oct. 27 2011 at 7:41 pm
Peanut98 BRONZE, Mauston, Wisconsin
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I love your poem!! it is amazing!!

on May. 26 2011 at 5:55 pm
Allthegoodnamesaretaken BRONZE, OKC, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Through every dark night, there's a bright day after that. -Tupac

the flow is off alot but the concept is good

on Mar. 21 2011 at 8:26 pm
dragonluver62897 BRONZE, Montrose, Michigan
4 articles 1 photo 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
A good leader doesn't necessarily take people to where they want to go, but ought to be. - Rosalynn Carter

This is an amazing poem and it's very deep and true. Suicide is a sad factor in life and sometimes we feel it's the only way out. I love it!

on Mar. 21 2011 at 1:34 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

this is really good!

on Oct. 18 2010 at 10:37 am
TamaraMari3 BRONZE, Mount Plesant, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't have to be great to start, but you have to start to be great."

Wow, this was a very powerful piece! I loved it!

on Sep. 4 2010 at 4:28 pm
Roseyalia SILVER, Don&#39t Need To Know, California
7 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take my love, take my land, take me where I cannot stand. I don't care, I'm still free, you can't take the sky from me. Take me out to the black. Tell 'em I ain't coming back. Burn the land and boil the sea, but you can't take the sky from me.

I was very moved by this.  Gorgeous and poignant, I give it 5 stars easily.

on Jul. 18 2010 at 7:27 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

This is a very well written poem . Powerful and interesting ! :) please check out my work and rate it if u have a chance :)

on May. 17 2010 at 2:02 pm
treegirl93 BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
1 article 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be nice to trees- they'll become books someday.

This is powerful. Maybe you could use less words to make it stronger. When i was reading it I starting singing it. It became a wonderful song. Ballads are always great songs- like The Beatles' songs.

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on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:03 pm
Meghanxo, Saugus, Massachusetts
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this was amazing!

justbe-3 said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 10:52 pm
justbe-3, Hollis, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"You live but once, you might as well be amusing." -Coco Chanel
"Here is the test to find whether your mission on Earth is finished: if you're alive, it isn't." -Richard Bach
"Gravitation is not responsible for people falling in love." -Einstein

that was amazing. you captured such a sensitibe subject and made it into a beautiful peace of poetry. 5 Stars!