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Through The Shadows

February 27, 2009
By project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
13 articles 1 photo 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Real Revolution Starts At Learning, If You're Not Angry, Then You Are Not Paying Attention" - Tim McIlrath


My feet fall heavy on the asphalt
Not running like they were
Yesterday.
Concrete slowly slips into my veins

I stumble (and finally fall)
Shadows dance for me and

I dance for them.
I walk to my house (they follow me)

But a house isn't a home

a home though

Is no longer safe
Open my arms to the darkness

Give up my soul (as it bleeds)
To whatever filthy hand

Decides to take it
I'm not running (unlike yesterday)

Ask no questions and get no lies

(And they will follow me home,
when I get home then I fade
into oblivion)


ripped apart by lead


The author's comments:
I know, this poem is pretty dark. Don't think I'm suicidal or anything, I'm actually a rather cheery person. I just write dark stuff.

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Lonleydandy said...
on Dec. 19 2009 at 7:52 pm
Love it love it love it...and I can totally relate to the little author's comments thing..haha, according to my friends, i am a naturally happy person..but most of my stuff is a little more depressing than my personality..haha. Anyway GREAT poem!!!

on Oct. 14 2009 at 10:13 am
Mika_Lestat PLATINUM, Shinnston, West Virginia
27 articles 0 photos 16 comments
Wow, that was amazing. You told me once to ignore people if they ever said my writings were to dark, so I extend the same advice. Darkness is a very beatiful thing.

Schubster said...
on Aug. 18 2009 at 2:30 pm
cool poem :) i love your work esp. "The Fall of Winter" keep writing.

on Aug. 6 2009 at 3:34 am
ladytrojan GOLD, Millington, Tennessee
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i didnt really get it?????????????????

on Aug. 6 2009 at 2:49 am
delizabethl PLATINUM, Linesville, Pennsylvania
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This truly poetry, as you are truly a poet.

on Aug. 5 2009 at 2:02 pm
carolinesell PLATINUM, Cedar Falls, Iowa
28 articles 0 photos 42 comments
it was really good but a bit dark for me...although my best friend would have loved it--it is the exact same thing she writes about! goodjob!

on Jul. 17 2009 at 4:57 pm
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
10 articles 0 photos 297 comments
wow, great descriptions! it is a bit dark but very very awesome (:

on Jul. 11 2009 at 11:31 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

I think this should be published- it's really good. I like how you used the parenthesis (very interesting).

p.s. Don't worry- alot of cheery people write darker things :-)



~I'd love any comments on my poetry and stories!~

on Jul. 11 2009 at 10:14 pm
scotttyboy SILVER, St.paris, Ohio
6 articles 0 photos 8 comments
WOW! this is the kind of stuff that i strive to write....absolutley beautiful....(:

keep at it!

PK4evr ELITE said...
on Jun. 4 2009 at 2:00 pm
PK4evr ELITE, Allen, Texas
105 articles 5 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, then watch everyone wonder how you did it!

Awesome rhythm and message. keep writing. btw thanks for your comments on mah work :)

on Jun. 2 2009 at 8:09 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."

This was really good and dark. I like how you can hook the reader on the first line, not many people can do that. It's considered a gift. Well, if you stop writing, i'll stop reading! This was soooo good!!! This has to be in a magazine!

RaeRae said...
on May. 17 2009 at 9:20 pm
This poem is really awesome!!! I honestly mean that too! :)

on Apr. 24 2009 at 3:04 pm
xXsmileXx PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
34 articles 0 photos 265 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your dreams only become intangible when you stop reaching" ~me ;)

WOW! I was hooked at the first line. That poem was beautiful, emotional, dark, and wesome. By the way, i write dark poems too...even though there's never a time i'm not smiling :)

on Apr. 8 2009 at 5:19 pm
tragicxharmony SILVER, Vicksburg, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am waiting; I am wanting; no more fighting; no more bleeding. <3

really awesome poem; this line especially: Give up my soul (as it bleeds), but this line: (And they will follow me home, when I get home then I fade into oblivion) i think might need a little bit of work...doesn't sound quite right to me.

poetryaddict said...
on Apr. 5 2009 at 2:45 pm
i really liked this poem, man. even if it is dark.

on Mar. 23 2009 at 9:08 pm
Mika_Lestat PLATINUM, Shinnston, West Virginia
27 articles 0 photos 16 comments
You said I was a genius....this was AWESOME! It was a masterpiece and you DEFINITELY be in the magazine!!!!