Thank you very much!

Thank you! It's kind of ufnny, actually, because I didn't get a notification of the publishing status of this one... I didn't even realize it until I saw the "MAG" stamp here. Maybe the site's just going wonky again.

I love the imagery and the flow of the poem!  Nice work on it.  I kind of like those last two lines in there and what the words mean.  :)

Yeah, it does! :) again, It's a really great piece! I just wanted to be sure I wasn't offending you with my oponions! lol, also congrats on getting it published in the magazine, that's really awesome!

  haha, thanks for the advice! constructive criticism is what i live for, doncha know.    i can't exactly edit the poem on the site now that it's posted, but i'll think about what you said and see if i can improve it :)   the context of the poem itself is actually that it's written from the point of view of someone who's already lost the person they're writing about, and doesn't want to admit that their heart was broken by him/her. (if that helps your interpretation at all)

This is a great poem, I really felt connected to the character's emotions. it made me relive a moment myself! the only thing I would do differently (and you honestly don't have to take my advice, I'm a teen as well haha) The ending might sound more powerful if you don't put the last two lines! I think that the reader may be able to infer that becasue the main character is visibly struggling so hard to hold onto their significant other, he/she will not admit in defeat. Or for that matter, admit to a broken heart due to the intense longing and attention they need from their partner! Or maybe just reword the last two verses into something short and cut to the point! I hope you take this with a grain of salt, haha, because it's only my opinion!! But overall I really TRUELY enjoyed this poem! It was very deep and powerful to me!