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Dead Flowers

July 7, 2009
By xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
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Painted Figures dance
across the floor
sparkles and ribbons
draped around their bodies
red and white flowers
hug my wrist
you smile, I blush
music plays,I hesitate
you assure me
I look great
I look down
at the flowers
I smile
joining the sea of figures
fading in and out
of the bright lights
as the music slows
you pull me close
I look at the flowers
which hug my wrist
beaming at their beauty
the music stops
the party's done...
...I lay in bed
staring at the flowers
wondering when you will
days pass
then weeks
slowly the petals
shrivel and decay
still you haven't called
I bury the flowers
in a deep coffin
there they sit
dead and shriveled
as you are to me

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This article has 7 comments.

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 22 2009 at 10:52 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I think this is my favorite. I love the imagery and how you compared the dead flowers to the guy in the poem. Bravo! ZERO

LIKEwhoaa GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2009 at 4:45 pm
LIKEwhoaa GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
The important thing is this: To be able at any moment to sacrifice what we are for what we could become.
-Charles DuBois

great job:)

the rhythm is really what captured me, i like how it goes off in one direction and then comes back again:)

it is a beautiful poem

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kianapearl said...
on Jul. 14 2009 at 10:05 am
Great poem:) Really nice imagery. Keep writing.

JustMe212 GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2009 at 2:56 am
JustMe212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
If you want to look young and Beautiful, stand next to ugly old people.
(love this, hilarious :)

Great job :) you really caprured the moment and used just the right words for visualization :) Thanks for commenting on my work, i appreciate it :)

on Jul. 13 2009 at 10:39 pm
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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wow, i love how you compared the wilted flowers to the guy. good thing you can move on! (: loved the poem!

on Jul. 13 2009 at 8:06 pm
Scorpiopoet GOLD, Torrance, California
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You did a good job of portraying the readers thoughts. i'm a fan of your work. Thnx for the comments on my poems btw. :)

cree8ive GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:08 am
cree8ive GOLD, Billings, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure." Mariane Williamson

i really like your poem. you did a great job capturing what you wanted to and i really like your style.