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Disconnected

November 3, 2023
By fahrenheit2206 BRONZE, Cupertino, California
fahrenheit2206 BRONZE, Cupertino, California
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 I tried to mimic Raymond Carver in terms of the way time passes and how his dialogue works. 


A bright dazzling light shines its way into the tinted passenger window of a compact sedan. Two brothers sit inside the sedan on their way to a movie. The eldest brother, the one driving, turns off a podcast on the Roman Empire and asks the boy in the passenger seat a question. The boy has turned 13, has a phone in his hand, and is looking into the horizon. The eldest asks a question. Why are you always on that device? You’re only 13. You don’t need to always be on it. I left for college only 4 years ago, what happened? The boy in the passenger seat turns his head towards the elder brother and begins to explain. 


A boy is on the shared family computer looking for a smartwatch for his 12th birthday. His mother walks up to him and asks a simple question. Why don’t you get a smartphone instead?


The boy really wanted a smartphone but didn’t want to push for it until he was sure his parents were okay with it. It’d be easier to contact you guys with a smartphone, that’s a better alternative. The boy walks over to his father who has been sitting on the sofa scrolling on his phone for the past 2 hours. 


A package which the boy had been yearning for had arrived. Peeling off the lithium ion battery stamp and opening the packaging, a smartphone was revealed. The boy powered it on. The boy whoops in excitement and rushes to show his parents.  

The default notification sound for the smartphone plays multiple times.

 

The parents of the child decide to take the boy go kart racing for his birthday, and the boy is on his phone the entire ride there. He isn’t communicating with his parents or his siblings. Put your phone down please. The boy's mother chides while scrolling through a dog water fountain page on instagram. The boy sighs and does what his parents told him to do. You really need to pick between spending time with your family or sitting on that device!


 I guess I never really thought that being on it all the time would really change my personality. The boys park at the theater. I always saw adults and my parents and even you on your phone, so I thought that to be a normal person in society , in order to fit in, I would hop on my phone and scroll for endless hours. The boys head up the stairs to the theater.  


The author's comments:

This piece was inspired by a short story author: Raymond Carver. I really feel that the addiction to technology in my generation is growing, and that people need to bring attention to this issue, now.


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