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Anguished Love

May 9, 2014
By WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
20 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” ~Maya Angelou


“No, It’s my fault, it’s my fault,” he sobbs, over and over again clutching her hand, stroking her face, as if his touch will heal her. She smiles up at him, and tries to lift her hand. He grasps it, oh how he grips it! Her eyes start to close. She works her mouth open and closed. He leans in, closer. “Love,” he makes out.
Her eyes flutter shut.
“Nooo!” A heart wrenching scream rips out of him, he howls in anguish. Tears stream down his face. He throws himself on her sobbing, and clutches her hand with a wild hope--but she is gone.
“Oh God please!” he screams, falling to his knees in utter desperation, feeling as if his very soul is being slashed. The wind rushes past, tearing the words from his mouth, whipping them around, through the dark shapes of leafless trees. But he doesn't notice the storm brewing. All he can think of is her soft laugh, her eyes that radiate warmth, her red lips, her beautiful face. Gone. Now the scene is replaying itself in his mind. Exploring in the woods, daring her to climb. The fall. He squeezes his eyes tight, trying to block the memory of her terrified face as she fell. He had raced towards her, but it wasn't soon enough. And now...now she was gone.


The author's comments:
When I started this, I had no idea where it was going. Originally I wanted write something that would make the reader's heart ache. So I hope you feel it tug at the innermost of your soul.

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on Jul. 4 2014 at 1:28 pm
WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
20 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” ~Maya Angelou

thank you!

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on Jul. 3 2014 at 3:43 pm
Oh dear God. That left knots in my stomach. That was beautiful, only for lack of a better word. I was returning the favor for you commenting on my short story "Faded" I've really got some work to do on portraying emotion if i want to match this! Great work :)

on Jun. 30 2014 at 12:29 pm
WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
20 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” ~Maya Angelou

thank you SO much 

on Jun. 30 2014 at 12:15 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1166 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Well done!!! This left me speechless for quite some time. I almost always have something to say, but this piece went straight to my heart. It was beautiful, it was trsgic, it was romantic, it was pure Literature!!! Keep it up!!! :,-)

on Jun. 30 2014 at 8:53 am
WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
20 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” ~Maya Angelou

Thank you so much

on Jun. 30 2014 at 12:07 am
SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You aren't going to impose the patriarchal paradigm on ME." Alaska Young

This is so beautiful. I feel the numb depression that he does in his short sentences. So beautiful. Please do not stop writing.

on May. 25 2014 at 9:30 am
WritinGirl PLATINUM, DeKalb, Illinois
20 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” ~Maya Angelou

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